Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Yeah of course, some people wish that graduates, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they were trained. In addition others feel the trained graduates must be free to work in abroad if they wish.

While, coming to the persons who believe to work in the country they were trained, their assumption is correct, which insight of developing his or her own nation. Such kind of people and with such a taught help their area to develop, but this should not become greed and spoile the educated ones life by confining his or her to a specified place with exploring everything.

Insight of the people who believe to make the the educates to work free in foreign, should be encouraged, because if he or she get employed in a foreign company would help the graduates to explore more places in the job fields. This even makes the graduates to get skilled with more knowledge including with international exposure.

The particular employee would even earn more compared with his or her fellow graduates who are working in the country where they were trained.

I believe getting employed in a country which has more demand in the course which they were being trained would actually preferable. Because not all countries would have suitable employment roles for the courses a person got graduated from the trained country. For example, if we consider India, it has good equipments, knowledge and experience in making engineers and doctors but it is difficult to get employed in India in such a roles. But it is easy to get employed in Germany as either a doctor or an engineer.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the benefits of working abroad, such as international exposure and higher earnings, the discussion on the opposing view—that professionals should work in their home country—is underdeveloped and lacks depth. The argument regarding 'greed' is vague and does not fully explore the economic or social implications of 'brain drain' for developing nations. To improve, ensure each viewpoint is supported by more detailed reasoning and clearer examples, rather than relying on general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and informal transitions. For example, starting a paragraph with 'While, coming to the persons...' is unnatural and hinders the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'In addition others feel' or 'Insight of the people'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument's development. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of unnatural word choices, such as 'spoile the educated ones life' and 'work in abroad'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'get skilled with more knowledge' instead of 'gain international expertise'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic vocabulary and idiomatic expressions appropriate for a formal essay. Focus on learning word families and common collocations related to professional development and migration.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the the educates'), subject-verb agreement ('not all countries would have...'), and awkward sentence construction ('which insight of developing his or her own nation'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately.

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