Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
While some people think that individuals, from background such as medical and engineering should only be allowed to do practice in the country where they pursued their degree. Whereas, others believe that they should not be forced to work in the country where they did their training but should have the freedom to work in other country if they wish. I believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be allowed to serve wherever they are given better opportunity and respect.
On the one hand, government provides scholarship for young talents to pursue their dream career without letting the student feel the burden of finance. Furthermore, these students who receive scholarships through their merit should be required to serve their country. As said, governments heavily invest in these scholarships where students can get the best the college and can have access to latest technologies which assist them to excel in their field. Providing this opportunity to grads, serving their nation though shall be mandatory.
On the other hand, highly skilled labours who choose to work in another country have their own reasons. Firstly, highly skilled individuals choose to work in another because they have better opportunity to earn. For example, wages of doctors and engineers are comparatively higher in USA when compared in India. Secondly, people choose to work in another nation is because the work they do is highly respected. For instance, in some parts of the world, even if you are a doctor or an engineer are either not paid enough or not respected enough. Due to these reasons people choose to have car
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction. However, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence ('Due to these reasons people choose to have car'). This lack of a conclusion and the unfinished final paragraph significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the initial arguments regarding government investment and personal career advancement are relevant, the abrupt ending prevents the essay from fully meeting the requirements of the task. To improve, ensure that all points are fully developed and that the essay concludes with a summary that reinforces your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'Furthermore', and 'Firstly' to organize ideas. Paragraphing is present, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is interrupted by the unfinished nature of the final paragraph. Additionally, some sentences are slightly disjointed, such as the opening sentence which is a fragment ('Whereas, others believe...'). To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that every paragraph is brought to a logical, complete conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some topic-specific terms like 'scholarships', 'merit', and 'highly skilled'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'do practice' instead of 'practice' or 'highly skilled labours' instead of 'highly skilled professionals'. The range is somewhat limited, and the repetition of phrases like 'work in another country' and 'work in another nation' suggests a need for more varied synonyms. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise academic collocations would improve the overall quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, the first sentence is a fragment, and there are issues with articles ('the best the college') and subject-verb agreement ('wages... are comparatively higher in USA when compared in India'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on sentence boundary control and article usage will help improve accuracy.
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