Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Numerous individual ponder that expert, like doctors and engineers, should be essential to occupation in the state where they did their duties. While, several public consider they should be mobile to profession in various country if they desire.
On the one hand, there are few reasons behind these happening. Ample public believe that doctors, engineers, businessman, youngsters, pupils and successful individual is the property of country due to they devote a lot of efforts in their states and earn massive amount. They acquire knowledge in native language and obtain lot of opportunity in his future. As a result, they gain a lot of experience in various sector but there are several difficulties in our country state does not offer a jobs in authority sector However, management analysis high corruption ratio in our country during public job issues. Secondly, in our country they feel calm and relaxation after work While, they live in openly environment and enjoy our religion ceremony without any issue.
On the other hand, there are lot of advantages to live and work in modern states. Firstly, in Europe and various continent offer scholarship and other subsidies for international student Furthermore, ratio of opportunity escalate in modern day's it is extremely beneficial for foreign students. In abroad pupils earn massive amount of money in various field.
In conclusion, i totally satisfied with the opinion due to both students and worker desire to obtain occasion in their country. According to my prospective government take initiative about this situation and offer subsidies in various sector.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, though the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the 'property of the country' and 'modern states' are somewhat disjointed and lack clear supporting evidence or logical flow. The conclusion is vague, stating the author is 'totally satisfied with the opinion' without clearly summarizing the stance taken. The essay tends to over-generalize, and the connection between the points made and the prompt is sometimes tenuous, particularly regarding the mention of 'businessman' and 'youngsters' as professionals. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument that directly relates to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is often difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a mechanical way that does not enhance the flow of the argument. For example, the transition 'While, several public consider' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the coherence. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track the subject matter. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'individual' instead of 'individuals', 'occupation' used as a verb, and 'mobile' used to mean 'free to move'. Phrases like 'modern states' and 'authority sector' are imprecise. The repetition of words like 'massive amount' and 'various' suggests a limited range. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more precise vocabulary to express complex ideas. Avoid using words if you are not entirely sure of their meaning or grammatical function.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'individual is the property'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity to demonstrate a wide range of structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization and missing commas. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement will help improve the accuracy of your writing significantly.
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