Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the present era, profession has become an important part of our lives. It is a topic that attracts the attention of people from all walks of life. There are different opinions and perspectives regarding this subject. Therefore, it is important to understand its significance, causes, effects, and role in our society. Many people argued that profession related to doctor or engineer done by our people have to stay remain in our country where did they done their training, while other claimed that they should be free to work in another country, if they want.
If doctors or engineers stays remain in the country and start their profession here, so it will help country in various ways. In emergency, there will always be a doctor which can help or do a surgery. Moreover, engineers can help in the development or progress of industries. Furthermore, our country continue to develop in every departments.
Apart from that, i think and other believe that people should be free to work in another region. They can earn a better lifestyle as compared to his or her country. They can increase their knowledge by reading books or meeting with new ones in another country. They can make thesis by meeting with other country professor.
From the light of above discussion, in my opinion people must have their own rights or opportunities to do anything. From this they can achieve their goals and a luxury life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is insufficient. The ideas are presented in a very basic manner, lacking the depth and supporting examples required for a higher band. The essay is also under the 250-word minimum, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the arguments. The introduction is overly generic and does not clearly outline the essay's scope. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a more thorough exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. While some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are sometimes used repetitively or in a way that feels forced. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that transitions smoothly into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'important part of our lives' and 'help in the development' are basic and lack the precision expected at higher levels. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'In the light of above discussion' (which should be 'In light of the above discussion') and 'luxury life'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any degree of sophistication. You should aim to incorporate more topic-specific collocations and academic vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Many people argued that profession related to doctor or engineer done by our people have to stay remain' and 'if doctors or engineers stays remain'. These errors involve subject-verb agreement and awkward sentence construction. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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