Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
in this essay i will explain my opinion about the given topic in my opinion everyone should allow to work where they want the fact is they have their own personal life they should do whatever they want
they should work either their own country or another country but i should recomed to work in its on country due to its your own home land your work and attention neends country development
moreover first of all i would say doctor and engineers work in their home land specially in those contry which are under development the people who lives in under deveolpment country they should not go for another country they should work for the their own country when one man sacrifice it self for a country it provide lesson to youth which is very benefitial for a country young generation neends motivation when a person fulfill his promises to its own motherland it defenatly spread the motivation to young generation
moreover i will say they should study from another country if they do not have good study system some peoples have dream to study in best universities and collages than they should move from one place to another but never forget the traditions of its own country
if a person lives in his own place where he born than the government also pays him good when a government pays him good he will work for his country with more love the government should build houses or a coummunty for those people who lives in their country even they have oppartunity to work abroad for more money
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is inconsistent. While you state your opinion, the arguments regarding 'under-development' and 'motivation' are somewhat repetitive and lack specific, concrete examples to support the claims. The essay touches on the requirement for professionals to work in their home country versus the freedom to work abroad, but the reasoning remains superficial. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-supported point rather than repeating the same general ideas. The conclusion is also missing, which is a key component of a balanced discussion essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the paragraphing is ineffective, with ideas running together. While some cohesive devices like 'moreover' and 'first of all' are used, they are often placed awkwardly or used to link unrelated thoughts. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences do not flow logically from one to the next. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each main idea and ensure that each sentence builds upon the previous one using a variety of linking words and referencing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'work', 'country', and 'good'. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'recomed', 'contry', 'deveolpment', 'defenatly', and 'coummunty', which occasionally make the text difficult to read. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas about professional mobility or economic development. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and improve the precision of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone should allow', 'young generation neends'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'its on country'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also problematic, with a lack of full stops and commas, leading to run-on sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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