Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
On the other hand, in 2018 leisure accounted for a significant number at 23%. This is followed by a steadily declined in housing and food at the value of 19 and 17 percentage respectively. Similarly, transport shows the usage of weekly income at 14%. By contrast fuel and power and personal goods are equal in value at 4% which is surpassed at 5% by clothing and footware. While, household goods remains at exact like in 1968
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a discussion on whether professionals should be required to work in their country of training, yet the text provided describes data regarding household expenditure and leisure activities. Furthermore, the response is significantly under-length at only 76 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. Consequently, the task has not been addressed at all, and the position is non-existent. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your essay directly answers the specific question asked, while also ensuring you meet the minimum word count.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
While there are some attempts at cohesive devices such as 'Similarly' and 'By contrast', the text lacks a logical structure because it is not addressing the task. The paragraphing is non-existent, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. Because the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the overall coherence is severely compromised. To improve, focus on structuring your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that develop specific arguments, and a conclusion, ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one in relation to the essay topic.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, focusing on basic descriptive terms for data ('accounted for', 'significant number', 'value'). There are also errors in word choice and form, such as 'steadily declined' (should be 'steady decline') and 'footware' (spelling error: 'footwear'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure you are using the correct word forms in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text contains several grammatical errors that impede clarity. Examples include 'steadily declined in housing' (incorrect verb form), '19 and 17 percentage respectively' (should be 'percent'), and 'remains at exact like' (grammatically incorrect). The sentence structures are simple and lack the variety required for higher bands. There are frequent errors in basic grammar and punctuation. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct word forms, and sentence structure, and proofread your work to catch these basic errors.
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