Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Describe the some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should required to work in the country . But the others people believe the they should to work out of country if they wish.
Some people believe the Doctors and Engineers and the work of out of country they study out of country and and prove of your opinions and the the of collect of the and the work of your country and the help of poor people and they build your hospital and free of check up and and help for poor people but this people not for help the poor people. So they cannot believe the people .
Secondly the Engineers they cannot for work on your country they work on out of country . So that the people they cannot believe other people .
On this my opinions the professions thee study for abroad the doctors and engineers and and better education and they help for your future goals . The study of abroad the better education and best of future of goals . The people abroad of your study they can help for your future goals,.
They can people successful on your goals . And this people of your country poor people . So that they can help your people than believe the of your profession. They you can not your help for the poor people so they cannot believe your profession. so u can help for the p
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. While it mentions doctors and engineers, the arguments are repetitive, fragmented, and lack logical development. The position is unclear, and the ideas regarding 'poor people' and 'believing in professionals' are not clearly linked to the core debate of mandatory service versus freedom of movement. Furthermore, the essay is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. The content is largely incoherent, making it difficult to identify a clear discussion of both views as requested.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. Paragraphing is used, but the content within the paragraphs is disjointed and repetitive. There is a severe lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often strung together with 'and' or 'so that' in a way that does not create a logical flow. The progression of ideas is absent, and the reader struggles to follow the writer's train of thought due to the lack of clear transitions and the repetitive nature of the sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. The writer relies on basic words such as 'people', 'work', 'study', and 'help', often using them incorrectly or in unnatural collocations (e.g., 'the work of out of country'). There is no attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to professional migration or training. The frequent repetition of phrases like 'help for your future goals' and 'poor people' indicates a very restricted range that prevents the expression of complex ideas.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly inaccurate throughout the text. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order (e.g., 'the others people believe the they should to work'). The use of articles and prepositions is consistently incorrect, and the punctuation is erratic. The response consists almost entirely of simple, error-prone sentences, with no evidence of complex structures. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and frequently impede communication.
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