Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
When it is come some issue leave country or stay counrtry . Some people believe that professional person should stay country other some people believe person should be free work another country . I , am dicusses both side in this essay . And I agrre those people who believe professionals should work free anothere country .
Firstly I agrre becouse a professionals worker like engineers,doctore first off all he or she as a human and its their right they work free if they wish . secondly a person leave another country becouse this country have some good facilites . For example Big amount salaries and good security , safty and good living system . Thirdly , some country world fist country for example USA , UK other country give a lot job opptunity but our country not provide enough jod offer .
On the othe hand , Those people believe professional worker person like doctore and engineers should stay in the country where they complet degre becouse people think government invest a lot amount many for their education . Another worming mantioning point government collet tax and this tax give mostly poor people thats why its people rights a professional person should not leave country .
Conculsion , to sum up about this topic and I , give my oppinion and explen both side those people think a doctor or engineer not leave country and those think sould leave . I am tottaly agree and i give my strong oppinon .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to address both views regarding whether professionals should work in their home country or abroad, and clearly states a personal opinion agreeing with the freedom to work internationally. However, the development of ideas is limited and hindered by severe linguistic constraints. The arguments presented in the second and third paragraphs are repetitive and lack detailed support. For instance, the points about salaries and government investment are mentioned briefly without being fully extended. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the overall development corresponds to Band 5, as the ideas remain limited, superficial, and under-developed due to the heavy strain of expression.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion, which shows an underlying attempt at logical structuring. However, there is a lack of clear progression, and the use of cohesive devices is extremely basic and often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'Firstly I agrre becouse', 'On the othe hand', 'Conculsion , to sum up'). Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences are disjointed. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs fails to guide the reader smoothly. These features place the response firmly at Band 4, as information and ideas are not arranged cohesively enough to ensure smooth reading.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student relies on elementary words and makes numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the essay (e.g., 'counrtry' for country, 'dicusses' for discuss, 'agrre' for agree, 'becouse' for because, 'doctore' for doctor, 'opptunity' for opportunity, 'collet' for collect, 'mantioning' for mentioning, 'explen' for explain). There is very little attempt at less common lexical items, and when attempted, errors are pervasive. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the most basic gist, but frequent errors strain the reader and obscure meaning, reflecting a Band 4 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The writing is dominated by frequent, dense basic errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, article use, and word order (e.g., 'When it is come some issue leave country or stay counrtry', 'a professionals worker like engineers,doctore first off all he or she as a human', 'government invest a lot amount many for their education'). There is a complete lack of accurate complex sentence structures; attempted complex or compound forms are consistently faulty. Errors are present in almost every sentence and frequently distort meaning, requiring the reader to guess the intended sense. This demonstrates a level below Band 5, placing it at Band 4.
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