Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
view 1some people that they should be work in their on country where they did training because they think that life in their own country is good and easy in their own country as copasred to other countries because they know every think in their country as compared to other countries and they know every rules and regulation in their own country as compared to other country and easy to make money and use their degree in own country as compared to other country and easy to built the trust of country .on the other hand some prople think that to work in other coutry is good as compared to other country because they think that other countries are good for job and work .and some peoples also have dream to go other country so thet preafer to do work in other country .in my opinion we should preafer to do workin own country because country need such intelligent people their is lack of such intelligent peoples because that type of peoples are good but they dont like to stay in country they complete thir degrees ond run to other countreis but i think they should stay in their own countries and help the peoples of their country forexample i think that doctor and engi neers are the main characters of country they play main role in country if they stay in their own country one day our country become more more and sucessfull because intelligent youth represent country in other countries so thats why i prefer to stay in country and work here as compared to other countries
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses both views regarding whether professionals should stay in their home country or be free to work abroad, and it provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For instance, the student repeatedly relies on phrases like 'as compared to other country' without introducing new analytical depth or specific supporting details beyond basic assertions. The arguments regarding why professionals leave and why they should stay are somewhat generalised and under-developed. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the lack of thorough elaboration places this performance at the lower end of the task response scale, matching Band 5 descriptors where ideas are limited and partially developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from severe structural and formatting issues. The entire response is written as a single, giant run-on paragraph with no logical paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the discussion of the two views, the writer's opinion, and the conclusion. There is a total absence of standard punctuation, capitalisation, and sentence boundaries. Although basic cohesive conjunctions like 'and' and 'on the other hand' are attempted, the lack of paragraphing and excessive repetition result in a mechanical and difficult read. Progression is obscured by the sprawling sentence structure. This falls squarely within Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently recycling words like 'country', 'other', and 'intelligent'. There are numerous spelling errors and word-form inaccuracies, such as 'copasred' for compared, 'built' for build, 'prople' for people, 'preafer' for prefer, 'thir' for their, and 'sucessfull' for successful. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for discussing a complex socio-economic topic with precision. While meaning can generally be deciphered through context, the errors in word choice and spelling cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The entire text is essentially one long string of clauses linked by coordinating conjunctions ('and') without proper sentence demarcation, capitalisation, or full stops. There are numerous basic grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('country need such intelligent people their is lack of such intelligent peoples'), incorrect verb forms ('they should stay in their own countries and help the peoples'), and missing articles. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of repetitive coordinate clauses. Frequent structural errors distort the flow and place the response at Band 4.
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