Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Few indidiuals thinks that emloyment like doctors and engineers should be crucial to work in the nation where they train that skill while others believe that they should be free to do job in foreign country that the wish for.
Overall, I strongly agree that if a person have a specific skill and if they want to travel in other country for that occupation then they should go for thay because they can get high pay for that job in other country another reason is that they can work with someone who have much better experience and can get that country residency with their work. they can make it easy fot other also by giving their full to their passion.
I strongheartly disagree with these type of people how think that if people are expert in a employment then they work in their country only because these people think that if they go in any other country then they will never mix with the peoples of other country and another reason is that these citizen just keep jealous from them they think that the qualification of these people are not that good that they can travel other country another reason is that because of their financial status people think they can't affort the travel expence.
In conclution if a person can affort that they can travel to other country then they should definitely go for that specific country as it offers many benefits however if a person can not affort the travel expenses then they should stay at their own country with that specific skill.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding professionals working in their home country or abroad, and provides the writer's own opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and often obscured by severe language errors. The student mentions reasons such as financial incentives, gaining international experience, and residency, which aligns with the task requirements, but the arguments are repetitive and lack logical elaboration. Furthermore, the counter-argument discusses jealousy and financial status rather than more substantive professional or economic factors. Overall, the task is addressed, but the execution remains basic and lacks fully developed extension. This places the response firmly at Band 5 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs representing an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an attempt at structure. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow due to poor punctuation, run-on sentences, and inadequate cohesive devices. Transitional phrases are either misused or absent, and referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., repeating vague pronouns like 'they' and 'them' without clear antecedents). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty and mechanical, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience. These limitations align closely with the descriptors for Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical resource is very basic and heavily impacted by numerous spelling and word-formation errors (e.g., 'indidiuals', 'emloyment', 'strongheartly', 'conclution', 'affort', 'expence'). The student attempts to use less common vocabulary such as 'qualification' and 'financial status', but inaccurate word choice and severe spelling errors repeatedly impede communication. The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple words. Consequently, the performance falls short of Band 5, demonstrating characteristics of Band 4 where errors strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simplistic run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions without proper punctuation or capitalization. There are persistent and fundamental grammatical errors throughout, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'Few indidiuals thinks', 'professionals... should be crucial'), incorrect article usage, and flawed sentence construction. Complex structures attempted by the student are consistently faulty and obscure meaning. Due to the high frequency of errors that cause significant difficulty for the reader, this response warrants a Band 4.
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