Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
so we are talking about main proffesion of country whic are doctor and engineers so we should talk first about doctor doctor is a very great profession because it is needed person in all over the world their are different types of doctor syrgical doctor dental doctor eyes spechlist or etc and now we should talk about engineers they also palyes a big role in their counry development becausetheir are different typea of engineers like road engineieer electricty engineers etc they are also important for every country so they should work in their country because with the help of them over country can achieve some awards for their country and make their own country proudi everyone have a right that what should do in their life if some one like dpctor wants to settle in other country they have the right because they gpes other country to eran more because in europen countries they can eran more easily money as camaring to asian country but in asian countris they work more in days but their slearis are less to complete their expencise so they should open a privat clinic to comeplete their expencise own the another hand the engieenire also have the same suitiuation so every person havr aright that if it is good for his self that he or she can easily servive in their country so they can stay here
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response falls below the required 232 words, failing the 250-word minimum, which negatively impacts task achievement. While the student attempts to discuss both views regarding professionals working in their home country versus abroad, the ideas are presented in a very simplistic and repetitive manner. The discussion touches upon motivations for migration, such as better salaries in European countries compared to Asian countries, but lacks depth and proper extension. Furthermore, the writer's position is somewhat unclear and obscured by run-on structures. Due to the under-length penalty and underdeveloped ideas, this response meets the criteria for Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised in this response. The entire text consists of a single, continuous, unbroken run-on sentence spanning 232 words without any punctuation or paragraph breaks. There are no clear organizational patterns, logical sequencing, or paragraphing. Basic cohesive devices are either absent or misused, resulting in a text where information and ideas are not arranged coherently. This clearly aligns with Band 3.0 descriptors, though a Band 4 is awarded as the overall flow follows a loose train of thought from introduction to conclusion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, limited, and repetitive throughout the essay. The student relies on elementary terms such as 'doctor', 'engineers', 'country', and 'money'. There are numerous spelling errors across common words, including 'proffesion', 'syrgical', 'spechlist', 'counry', 'proudi', 'eran', 'camaring', 'slearis', 'expencise', and 'engieenire'. These lexical limitations and frequent spelling mistakes strain the reader and reflect a vocabulary range typical of Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatically, the response is extremely weak. The complete absence of punctuation—such as periods, commas, and capitalisation—means there is no control over sentence boundaries, resulting in a single massive run-on sentence. There is no variety of complex structures; instead, simple clauses are endlessly strung together with conjunctions like 'and' and 'because'. Frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('doctor is... their are') and incorrect pronoun usage, distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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