Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The professionals of doctor and engineers is required in all times every day in every country. Because this professional is very popular and required in every times.

Firstly, the professional of engineers and doctors is very popular. Therefore, we should the worker of engineers and doctors provides facilities for government because that help with professional and that experience. doctors and engineers should free work in some time of every day because poor people helped and engineers experience shared another men. Government should free facilities of engineers because that helped in government projects and that solve that questions about constructions of roads and other government projects. Doctors should free check-up for poor people because that people attacked in more fungus and not treated because that people not stable for check-up.

secondly, On my opinion we should to be doctors helped in times when that circle in dificults times. On my country some people are not stand for in me foots because that poor men ant not treated for diseaese.

Further more, The government should made for campus in every city and doctors required because their are helped for poor peoples

To conclude, some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. On my opinion government should some free facilities for doctors if that free treatment for some poor men if they treated and spend happily life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether doctors and engineers should work in their home countries or abroad, but the ideas are limited and under-developed. While the writer touches on the importance of these professionals and mentions poor people and government projects, the position is not always clear, and the arguments are repetitive and tangential. Sentences such as 'doctors and engineers should free work in some time of every day because poor people helped' fail to fully explore both views in a structured manner. To move forward, the writer needs to clearly separate the two opposing views, provide extended reasoning for each perspective, and present a distinct personal opinion supported by relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response displays some organization with basic paragraph breaks, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either inadequate, repetitive, or inaccurate, which disrupts the flow of the text. For instance, transitional phrases like 'Firstly,' 'secondly,' 'Further more,' and 'To conclude' are used, but the internal connections between sentences are often faulty, making the referencing unclear (e.g., 'because that people not stable for check-up'). Paragraphing is also misused, as body paragraphs contain a jumble of unrelated points about government projects and poor relief without a unifying theme. To improve, the writer should ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea and use logical links to connect sentences smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'professional,' 'country,' 'government,' and 'people.' There are frequent errors in word choice, word form, and collocation that strain the reader's understanding, such as using 'worker of engineers' instead of 'engineers' or 'free work' instead of 'voluntary work' or 'freedom to work.' Spelling and lexical control are weak, with instances like 'dificults' and awkward phrases like 'spend happily life.' To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, learn correct word forms, and practice using less common lexical items accurately in appropriate contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text, such as 'The professionals of doctor and engineers is required' and 'The government should made for campus.' Attempts at complex sentences are consistently faulty, often resulting in meaning being distorted or obscured by incorrect prepositions and clause structures. Punctuation is also erratic. To improve in this area, the writer needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, accurate verb tenses, and mastering the foundations of simple and compound sentences before attempting more complex structures.

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