Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in my persepctive i beleive that is their personal choice where they want to work but i think worker need to work where they feel comfortable easy to work and if u working in any profession we choose we have to work for long time so we nned to see where which country is suitable for us and we dont feel boring to work so we can work .

i dont think we need to work from where we get training because training is just part of profession where we learn skill and after learning skill we can start our career anywhere we want. example so when we study in school, college if we study there that not mean we had to work in that school or college its depend person choice where they want to start their working profession.

in my perseptive we can study anywhere or get training anywherer but we should choose that place where we never feel boring and exhausted from our profession because job, carrier is long term profession without excitement we cant continue that as longterm so we shoud lissten ourself .and also i tolfd this is my point ogf vie every person have thieir one vies

reasons, in most of term i seen people choose their working profession accordimng to their parents suggestion but after some year they start feeling boring and in less time they just quite there working life so its better where we want to work or study or training do from here choose country where you like to stay and work just buid your carrier that matter most than anythings .

conclusion that doesnt matter where we study we need to work there just choose your own path and do whatever you feel happy and excites.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task minimally, touching upon both views regarding where professionals should work and offering a personal opinion. However, the ideas are presented in a very basic and repetitive manner without sufficient extension or support. For instance, the argument that professionals should choose a comfortable country to avoid feeling bored is stated repeatedly rather than developed with well-reasoned explanations or relevant examples. The comparison to school and college is underdeveloped and lacks clarity. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to fully explore both sides of the argument with clear, well-supported supporting points rather than relying on generalized assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout the response. Although paragraphs are attempted, the progression of thought is difficult to follow due to a lack of clear logical organization. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inadequately, resulting in run-on sentences and a disjointed structure. For example, sentences are often strung together with basic conjunctions or punctuation errors rather than logical connectors. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as the sudden shift into personal anecdotes without clear signposting. Improving this criterion requires structuring the essay into distinct, logically sequenced paragraphs with appropriate cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly from one idea to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, utilizing restricted terms such as 'work', 'job', 'profession', and 'country' continuously throughout the text. There are numerous spelling errors and incorrect word choices, such as 'persepctive', 'beleive', 'nned', 'carrier' instead of career, 'tolfd', and 'quits'. These lexical limitations and errors often strain the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range by incorporating less common vocabulary, improving word formation, and ensuring correct spelling throughout the piece.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying almost exclusively on simple or poorly linked clauses. Errors are frequent and pervasive, including major issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and a complete absence of proper punctuation and capitalization. Sentences frequently run together without periods or commas, such as '...so we can work . i dont think...'. Complex sentence attempts are faulty and obscure the intended meaning. To improve, the writer needs to practice fundamental sentence construction, master basic punctuation rules, and reduce the frequency of grammatical errors across simple and complex sentences alike.

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