Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Although moslty the public believe that professionals should be require to employment in their country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country, if they wish.

The professionals such as doctors, engineers etc shoud be required to start their journey in their own country where they did their whole training. In my perspective, i strongly believe that they should start their employment in their own country as well. Because they should achieve more oppurtunities to get beneficial post according to thier profession. I totally believe that if they work on their own country, they provide more oppurtunities and also facilities for their own nation. Moreover, they create employment for jobless public to get facilitate from their own profession. For example, if a doctor start employment in the country where they did their whole training. They gave a chance to other students to educate and provide training for newly appoint doctors. In result of, the percentage of employment increased rapidly and numerous facilities easily gain any other individual.

In consequent that i also agree on the other individuals who believe that if they should go on another country to start their employment there. Because they should work for their families but also they provide many oppurtunties for those peoples who don't even get job in their own country. Therefore, they create more facilities for their nation to start doing employment and get chance to gave significant jobs for their public. To illustrate, if an engineer should be free will to work in another country. Moreover they should provide more employment for their own country individuals. They create numeruous facilities for their own government. As a result the government economy increased significantly and also there are more job oppurtunties there to start employment to another country respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on whether professionals should work in their home countries and providing a personal opinion. However, the task is only partially addressed because the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the argument that doctors training new staff increases employment is stated rather than logically extended with clear supporting detail. The position is discernible throughout the essay, but the reasoning often becomes repetitive, such as when discussing how professionals provide facilities for their nation. To move to a higher level, the writer would need to expand on their main ideas with fully developed explanations and relevant, specific examples rather than relying on generalized assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay displays some organization with discernible introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, but it lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow of the body paragraphs is disrupted by repetitive statements and unclear connections. Cohesive devices are used, but they are frequently inaccurate, repetitive, or mechanically applied, such as starting multiple sentences and paragraphs with transition words like 'Moreover', 'Therefore', or 'To illustrate', which do not always match the logical relationship of the clauses. Additionally, referencing is at times unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact progression of thought. Achieving a higher standard would require ensuring a smooth, logical flow of ideas and a wider, more precise range of cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey basic concepts related to employment and training. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling throughout the text, such as 'moslty' instead of mostly, 'oppurtunities' instead of opportunities, and 'peoples' instead of people. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items, such as 'significantly' and 'profession', but imprecise collocations and awkward phrasings cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve in this area, the student must focus on accurate spelling, correct word forms, and developing a broader, more natural range of vocabulary suitable for academic contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside poorly controlled attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors in the text, including issues with verb forms and tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'professionals should be require to employment' and 'if a doctor start employment'. Punctuation errors also occur, with fragmented sentences like 'In consequent that i also agree...' causing confusion for the reader. These frequent errors impede smooth reading and affect the clarity of the message. A higher score would require a greater variety of error-free complex sentence structures and much better control over basic grammatical patterns.

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