Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Medical and engineering fields have become very popular in the whole world.Every person has apptitude to be specialized in these both fields.According to some people, the professionals such as doctors and engineers should work in the country where they got their training.According to other people,If they wish,they should be free to work in another country.I would like to explain both views and I will give my opinion in conclusion.
By understanding the given statement, On the one hand, professionals such as doctors and engineers should work in the country where they got their training.There are many benefits for doctors and engineers that where they got their training,they would be able to take help from their training institute.They will also be able to overcome all difficulties in doing their working.By working in their training country,they will prepare themselves in their field very easily and completely.They willl reach to their home very easily.On the other hand, there are also people that beleive that they should be free to work in another country if they wish.The reason of this view is that doctors and engineers have special apptitude to work in abroad countries for the sake of money and more income.Some doctors and engineers get their education specially for going abroad for the sake of money.There are many benefits of working in another country.Doctors and engineers would be able to earn more money to meet their educational and home expenses.By doing this, they will complete their apptitude to go abroad for work.
In conclusion,I strongly support second view because many doctors and engineers have fond of going abroad for work.They will earn more money to meet their educational,personal and home expenses.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task partially, as required at this level. You presented both views regarding whether professionals should work in their home countries or abroad, and stated your own opinion in the conclusion. However, your ideas are limited and under-developed. For example, when discussing why professionals should stay in their training country, you mention they can 'take help from their training institute' and 'reach to their home very easily', but these points lack depth, specific examples, or clear elaboration. Similarly, your supporting points for working abroad repeatedly rely on the same narrow idea—earning money for personal and home expenses—without exploring broader socio-economic impacts. To move to a higher level, you need to extend and fully support your main points with detailed explanations and relevant examples rather than simply repeating the same underlying ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation in your essay, such as using transitional phrases like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' to signal different parts of your response. However, there is no clear overall progression throughout the text. The flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by mechanical referencing and repetitive phrasing. For instance, you frequently start sentences in the body paragraphs with similar repetitive structures like 'There are many benefits...' or 'By doing this...'. Furthermore, cohesive devices are sometimes inadequate or inaccurate, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed rather than naturally linked. To improve, you should focus on varying your cohesive ties, ensuring smooth transitions between paragraphs, and organizing your supporting arguments so they build logically upon one another rather than circling back to the same point.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Your vocabulary range is limited but minimally adequate to communicate your basic points. You attempt to use some less common words, such as 'specialized', 'professionals', and 'institute', but there are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. For example, you misspelled 'apptitude' multiple times and used it inappropriately in contexts where 'desire', 'aspiration', or 'ambition' would be much more natural. Phrases like 'work in abroad countries' and 'have fond of going abroad' also demonstrate awkward collocations and incorrect lexical forms. To reach a higher standard, you need to expand your vocabulary range, learn the correct grammatical forms and collocations of words, and carefully check your spelling before finishing your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Your essay displays a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside basic attempts at complex clauses. When you attempt complex sentences, they are often faulty. For instance, conditional and dependent clauses contain punctuation and phrasing errors, such as 'According to other people,If they wish,they should be free to work in another country', where spacing and comma usage are problematic. There are also frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and prepositions inside grammatical patterns, such as 'in the whole world', 'in their training country', and 'reach to their home'. These frequent errors create noticeable strain for the reader. To achieve a better outcome, you must practice using a wider variety of complex grammatical structures accurately, ensure proper spacing and punctuation after commas, and pay closer attention to prepositions and article use.
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