Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people argue that working professionals should to allowed to work in any country they want irrespective of where they completed their training. while, other say they should only be allowed to work in other countries.I believe that they should have right to decide their every move as many countries offer better future and high tech equipment that may not be available in their country they would be able to secure better future for themselfs.

It is not fesible for students to only work in country they have trained in.Many nations offer better institutions with advance facilities.Furthermore, students also travel to study abroad in order to complete master or bachelors degree. For instance, the number of students moving abroad has increased more than before. The change in economic value of a country motivates students to move abroad for higher education. These students are the assets of a country and should be allowed to work in their motherland.

On the other hand, if a nation lacks these professionals they could also get in serious problems. Countries like Africa, where education is not good many people die because of simple diseases.UNICEF a foundation has been looking out for such nations and provides them with educated individuals that treat their people. Similarly the population of elderly has also increased alot in Japan. They offer professionals from other countries to come and work for the benefit of nation.

In conclusion, countries cannot survive with such logic, in order for world to be a better place we need to keep our borders open for individuals that have knowledge and passion to work.Bounding a persion to only work in country where they have trained may keep them years away from their families.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear preference for allowing professionals to choose where they work, and you discuss both the freedom to move and the needs of countries with shortages. The examples of Japan’s ageing population and support for countries with limited healthcare help make the second view relevant. However, the first view is not fully explained: the paragraph shifts from professionals’ right to work abroad to students’ reasons for studying abroad, and the claim that they are “assets” who should work in their “motherland” is not clearly connected to the debate. Your position is also expressed mainly in the introduction and conclusion rather than developed through the discussion. Explain each side directly and support your opinion with more precise reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” signal changes in direction. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the discussion of studying abroad moves to students being national assets without explaining the connection to where trained professionals should work. Some references are unclear, as in “they could also get in serious problems,” where the referent is not precise. The conclusion introduces family separation, which has not been developed earlier. Build each paragraph around one clear argument and use transitions and references to show how each example supports it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “professionals,” “advance facilities,” “higher education,” and “elderly,” and the meaning is generally recoverable. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “secure better future” and “educated individuals.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts less clear, including “fesible,” “high tech equipment,” “alot,” and “Bounding a persion.” Some phrases are imprecise for the argument: “change in economic value of a country” does not clearly explain why students move, and “countries like Africa” treats a continent as a country. Choose accurate, natural collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example, “as many countries offer better future…” and “if a nation lacks these professionals…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles, and agreement sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. Examples include “should to allowed,” “other say,” and the run-on construction beginning “I believe that they should have right…”. The sentence starting “while, other say” is not correctly joined to the preceding sentence, and punctuation is often missing between complete ideas. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear conjunctions and correct articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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