Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this days, every people wants to be a Independent person. For the reason some people argue that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be individual to work in another country if they desire. Other people think that where they did their training in the country, they should be required to work there. In my opinion, people who are the professionals they should listen their own.

At the one hand, it is true that if the professionals are working the place where they did their training, they will be success in their job life. For example, a group of doctors did their internship in a reputed hospital under the Neuro sergon, if they are working in this hospital they can understand easily the systam, regulation and patient narve. Working the same place, they can get good reputation from their colluge; they understand each other; discuss the problem with their traineer; easily get good carrier.

On the other hand, People need to be a Independent and self-reliant. A doctor or a engineer, in their academic life they worked hard. After finished their education they should listen their heart, because if they choose their profession feild with independently they can do their job or work from happiest mind and heart. For example, many of the students of MBBS and Bachelor of science and civil they go to the UK and USA for the higher studies or job. As a result, they secure their future life; good career with life security; chance to get nobel or any kind of prizes. That's why for any kind of professional life people encouraged their own choice or wish.

In conclusion, For their better life, doing work with fullfill, every workable person should be free to another country or anywhere if they wish.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give an opinion, so the response is relevant to the task. The first body paragraph explains why staying where professionals trained could help them understand local systems and work with colleagues; the second presents personal choice and career opportunities abroad. However, the position that professionals “should listen their own” is unclear, and the conclusion supports freedom to move without clearly reconciling the benefits of staying. Several supporting claims, such as gaining a “good reputation” or a chance to win prizes, are asserted rather than explained. To strengthen the response, state your position precisely and develop each view with a clear reason and a relevant, specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the other hand” helps signal the shift between arguments, and examples are placed alongside the relevant points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves quickly from understanding the system to reputation, discussion, and career prospects without showing how these points connect. The conclusion also repeats the preference for choice rather than drawing the discussion together. Some linking phrases, including “At the one hand” and “That's why,” are awkward or do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each supporting detail explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to professional work and education, including “self-reliant,” “internship,” “regulation,” and “higher studies.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make parts of the argument hard to interpret, such as “patient narve,” “good carrier,” and “doing work with fullfill.” Spelling errors such as “systam,” “col luge,” and “traineer” also reduce clarity. Some phrases are repeated, particularly “work,” “life,” and “choice or wish.” Build a more accurate set of topic-specific collocations and check spelling; this will make your meaning clearer and allow you to express the arguments more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer conditional or explanatory sentences, for example, “if the professionals are working the place where they did their training, they will be success.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but complex constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “In this days, every people wants,” “they should listen their own,” and “After finished their education.” These show problems with articles, agreement, verb patterns, and sentence construction. Practise building accurate clauses with “if,” “because,” and “after,” and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms. More reliable sentence patterns will help your ideas come through without requiring the reader to infer your meaning.

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