Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

One argument is that professionals, like doctors and engineers, should need to work in the same country where they learned, while others believe that they should be independent to go anywhere in all of the world. when a person receives training is certainly for the country where he learned. To going abroad is also beneficial be their are more chances of acquiring knowlendge. From my perspective, to go overseas is more healthful because he can learn international skills and abilities.

The individuals who don't go anywhere and performs their duties in the country where they learn, its mean they are working in their niche. For instance, a doctor receive his traing in Pakistan, he will be well known about Pakistan's diseases. As a result, he will profession in his niche.

On the other hand the persons who go abroad, they will learn international level about his profession and adopt averseas abilities. For example, in Pakistan technological instruments are less than others, and when an engineer go to other countries and perform his job then he will work accurately and in good way. Consequently, he will be more knowledge, skills and abilities than others.

In conclusion, the person who do

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both positions and state a preference for working overseas, so the response is relevant to the question. The examples about a Pakistani doctor understanding local diseases and an engineer gaining experience with better technology begin to explain the two views. However, the discussion is brief and the reasons are not sufficiently developed: the claim that overseas work is “more healthful” is unclear, and the conclusion is unfinished (“In conclusion, the person who do”). The response also contains 199 words, below the required 250, which limits how fully you can address both sides and support your opinion. Develop the benefits and drawbacks of each option, explain your own view clearly, and complete the essay with a reasoned conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph about staying in the training country, a paragraph about working abroad, and an attempted conclusion. Connectors such as “For instance,” “On the other hand,” and “Consequently” help signal examples and contrast. However, progression is limited, and some links are unclear or mechanical. For example, “As a result, he will profession in his niche” does not clearly connect the example to its outcome, while the final paragraph stops before completing the conclusion. The opening also moves quickly between the two views and your opinion without clearly setting out the essay’s direction. Use a clearer sequence of claim, explanation, and example in each body paragraph, and ensure the conclusion summarises your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “professionals,” “training,” “diseases,” “technological instruments,” and “skills and abilities,” which makes the subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For example, “independent to go anywhere” is not a natural way to express freedom of choice, “more healthful” does not clearly convey your intended benefit, and “adopt averseas abilities” is unclear. There are also spelling errors such as “knowelendge” and “traing.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “free to work abroad,” “gain international experience,” and “advanced equipment,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses to give reasons and examples, such as “when a person receives training…” and “when an engineer go to other countries…”. However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation can make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “when a person receives training is certainly for the country,” “a doctor receive,” “the persons … performs,” and “an engineer go.” The opening “when” is also incorrectly capitalised, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check singular–plural agreement, and use full stops to separate ideas.

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