Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Here the arrgue between to did work in the another country or where they have done their traning i think according to my opinion peoples done their work according to their wish and my opinion is also the work should done in that country where we want to work and where we feel comfort .On the oher hand people done thier professional life in the country wher they have done the traing because in that country where they learn work and i think also to provide services to that country. and in that country where they traind out this is the place where they feel also comfort to communicat and in the residency so most people choose that type of country because they feel easy to lived . According to my opinion i wanted to go for a work in the other country not in the country where i was trained because in this way i learn more thing which is happened in this world rather than that where i trained because if i work on taht place of traing i cannot see other world phenomenas and i bounded between me and my work .So i preffer to work in the another country . Through this it's a big opportunity to work with diiferent peoples and with the work i can experiences diffrent places and different peoples. And also i seggust to other peoples that i am beliveable to work in the other contry as compared to taht contry where i tranied it's not just like that i want to say bad thing to work in the country where they trained it is also a grateful experiences to met those people who are in your srrounding.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear personal preference: you would choose to work abroad because it could expose you to new experiences and people. You also mention the opposing view, explaining that professionals may stay where they trained to serve that country and because they feel comfortable there. These points are relevant, but the discussion is only partial: the reasons for staying are briefly stated, and the benefits of working abroad are repeated rather than developed with a specific example or fuller explanation. The position is present, though it would be clearer if stated directly and consistently. To strengthen the response, explain the competing arguments in more depth and support each with a concrete example, such as how a doctor might repay publicly funded training.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from the view that professionals should stay to your preference for working abroad, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “According to my opinion” signal changes in direction. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the response reads largely as one long sequence. Several points recur—for example, comfort, meeting different people, and gaining experiences—without a clear progression. Some links are also difficult to follow, particularly “And also i seggust to other peoples…” To improve, use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, give each paragraph one main point, and connect supporting explanations with clear references rather than repeatedly adding “and” or “because.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You communicate the central ideas using basic vocabulary such as “work,” “country,” “people,” and “different,” but the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated. Some choices make the meaning difficult to understand, including “work in the another country,” “other world phenomenas,” and “i am beliveable to work.” Spelling errors such as “traning,” “diiferent,” and “seg gust” also reduce clarity. There are attempts to express more specific ideas, such as learning about the wider world and gaining experience, but these need more accurate and natural wording. Build a small set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “gain international experience” rather than “experiences different places.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences using “because” and “where,” but these structures are often faulty, and most sentences contain errors that can make the reader work to understand the meaning. For example, “the work should done in that country where we want to work” is missing an auxiliary verb, while “people done their professional life” has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “i think according to my opinion peoples…” and the long sentence beginning “On the oher hand.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one subordinate clause. Check verb forms, articles, and punctuation, and avoid joining several separate ideas into a single sentence.

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