Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In my opinoion, the view of the both type of people is respectful and good to theie thoughts and ideas.

Let's firt of all discussing the first idea of the professional people (e.g doctors and engineer ) should work inside the

country we they are training or where they are residence of .For a person working inside his /her country is a symbol of the

loyalty and respect to words the place or the country from where he got his knowledge where he grew up and from where he became capable of doing or achieving something in his/her life.

If a person is inside a country after becoming professional in thier fileds is also a good symbol for the devolpment progress and prosperity of their county and nation because if these professional people will working inside the country they will produce more people like them inside the country and will aslo people will get inspired by those poeple that could serve a

symbol for the progress and prosperity of the country and in this way they will be capable of making great the related sector throughout the world.

Going outside the country of the professional people is also normal if anyone who wants to go outside his/her country to

work or apply his experince.If anyone wants to go outside their should not be any restrictions because it would against the

humanatarian principles .Moreover, the professional person will be unable to do his job very well if he is forced to work

inside his country without his wellings,because everything is done with happiness and enthusiasm and welling of heart is more useful and important than those that are done by force.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both positions and give a clear preference for allowing professionals to work abroad, especially when you argue that forcing someone to stay may reduce their enthusiasm. You also explain why retaining trained professionals could benefit national development. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the first view relies mainly on loyalty and the general claim that professionals can inspire others, without a concrete example or explanation of how this would work. Your opinion appears most clearly in the final paragraph rather than being established and maintained throughout. Develop each side with a specific reason and example, then state your position clearly in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall shape: it introduces the issue, discusses the case for working at home, and then turns to the freedom to work abroad. Phrases such as “Moreover” and “In this way” attempt to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several points are joined into very long sentences, and the first paragraph’s ideas about loyalty, development, inspiration, and global achievement are not clearly separated. The opening sentence also does not guide the reader toward the essay’s position. Use distinct paragraphs for the introduction, each view, and the conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main point with clear links between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “professionals,” “loyalty,” “prosperity,” “restrictions,” and “enthusiasm,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the usable range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “opinoion,” “devolpment,” “humanatarian,” and “experince”; phrases such as “the view of the both type of people” and “welling of heart” are also unnatural. Aim to learn accurate collocations as well as individual words, and proofread spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “retain skilled workers” and “freedom of choice” would help you express the arguments clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use conditional forms, for example, “If anyone wants to go outside their should not be any restrictions.” However, the sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and punctuation frequently make the meaning hard to follow. In “these professional people will working,” the verb form is incorrect; “where they are training” also needs a suitable passive construction, such as “where they were trained.” Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the long explanation beginning “For a person working inside his /her country.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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