Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Doctors and engineers are the backbone of the modern they society.It is often argued the professionals,such as doctors and engineers,should be required to work in the country where they did their training.Some other believes that they should be free to work in another country if the professional have the opportunity.

I disagree,with the statement that professionals such as doctors and engineers,should be required to work in the country where they did their training, because it is a independent decision for a professional where to work or where not to work.Professionals who want to gain more experience or some financial benefit want to work wherr they get paid more.

However,i agree some people believe professionals should be free to work in another country if they wish.Professionals like doctor and engineers look for better opportunity,if professionals get a much better financial benefit or good pay check they can definitly move to another country.Working in aboard and moving from a third world country can help the professional gain more work experience.

In a nutshell,There should be free will for a professional like doctors and engineers to work in their country after training there or they should be free to work in another country if they seek a better opportunity.After all people work for a better salary rather than going to somewhere where a professional can not get a desire salary as the professional expected.

Moreover, in the end work place environment also plays a major key role in professionals life.Some professional choose another country because of the work life environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address the topic and state a view, particularly when you say professionals should be free to choose where they work. However, the discussion of the two views is uneven: the reasons for working abroad—higher pay, experience and workplace conditions—are mentioned, but the case for requiring trained professionals to serve in that country is not explained. Your position is also difficult to follow because you first say “I disagree” with compulsory work, then say “I agree” with freedom to move, without clearly comparing both sides. The response contains 191 words, so it is 59 words below the 250-word minimum; the 71 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both arguments and support them with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and a recognisable sequence: an introduction, reasons for mobility, and a concluding statement. Some linking expressions, such as “However,” “In a nutshell,” and “Moreover,” help signal transitions. Nevertheless, the ideas are not arranged into a clear discussion of both views, and the conclusion repeats the preference for choice rather than drawing together the arguments. Connections between sentences are sometimes abrupt, as in the shift from financial benefits to the final point about workplace environment. The opening sentence is also difficult to follow, which weakens the introduction. Organise the body into one paragraph for each view, use clear references to connect ideas, and ensure each paragraph advances the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “financial benefit,” “work experience,” “salary,” and “work place environment,” so the reader can identify the main concerns. There is also an attempt to use phrases such as “backbone of modern society” and “third world country.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “professionals,” “work,” and “better.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “a desire salary,” “better opportunity,” and “major key role.” Spelling errors including “wherr,” “definitly,” and “aboard” also reduce precision. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing recruitment, public service, career prospects and migration, and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example, “Professionals who want to gain more experience or some financial benefit want to work…” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but sentence structures remain limited and errors are frequent. Examples include “the modern they society,” “Some other believes,” and “if the professional have the opportunity,” where word order or subject–verb agreement is faulty. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in “like doctor and engineers,” while punctuation and spacing are often inaccurate, as in “I disagree,with” and “In a nutshell,There.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise accurate sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and plural forms before adding more complex clauses.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.