Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that proffessionals,such as doctor and engineers,should be required to work in the country where they did their trining. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.I strongly believed by they should be work in another country most of the benifits for that professionals.

On the one hand, some people argue that doctors and engineers worked by their country.While,that professional are very important in all the peoples with health and buildings.For example, doctor field is very important because people suddenly health issue affected and injuary,accident case they cure only dotors.Some time doctors trining healthy activity and daily food habites also they can access every people.The second one,engineers are intelligents by build a big buildings.They are unique design and how to strong building build the place only engineers.As a rusult,Doctor must in their country and also equal to engineers without that a person stop the works.

On the other one,The main advantage of that professionals working in another country highest salary and achieved their future goals very quickly.While,the abroad country high salary prefer for doctor and also good post graduate study.Furthermore,engineers also prefer highest salary in another country.So that others believed they should be free to work in another country. As a result, most of the doctors and engineers working in another country and also another professionals also works by abroad countrys.In my opinion also working another country best way for future goals.

In conclusions, Some people believe that professionals should be requiredto work in the country.But other people believe such as doctors and engineers working in another country because other country big salary pefer and study is best in their coutryside ,so that people and i think another country best sollution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question and state a preference for professionals to work abroad, so the response is relevant to the task. However, the position is not consistently expressed: the opening says “I strongly believed by they should be work” and the conclusion shifts between summarising both views and saying another country is the “best sollution.” The reasons are also limited and often asserted rather than explained. You mention higher salaries and postgraduate study as reasons to move, but do not show how these benefits compare with the needs of the country that trained the professionals. The discussion of the first view mainly describes why doctors and engineers are important, rather than developing why they should be required to stay. Explain the competing arguments more directly and support them with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the broad direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several linking expressions are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “On the one hand” is followed by “While,” and “On the other one” is an awkward transition; “As a result” is also used where the preceding point does not clearly lead to a consequence. Some sentences are difficult to connect, such as the discussion of doctors’ health advice followed by the claim that engineers build large buildings. Use clearer topic sentences, group related reasons, and make each sentence’s relationship to the next explicit. This would create a more logical overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “professionals,” “salary,” “post graduate study,” and “future goals,” which allows the reader to recognise the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “doctors and engineers worked by their country,” “highest salary prefer,” and “a person stop the works.” Spelling errors are also frequent, including “proffessionals,” “trining,” “benifits,” and “countrys.” These issues sometimes make the reader work to understand your point. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing employment and migration, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “retain skilled workers” and “seek better-paid positions” over repeated general references to working abroad.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to organise ideas into sentences and use some longer structures, including “because” and “so that,” but the range is limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear throughout: “I strongly believed by they should be work,” “doctors and engineers working in another country,” and “most of the doctors and engineers working” lack accurate grammatical patterns. Agreement and articles are also problematic, as in “a person stop the works” and “the abroad country.” Punctuation and spacing errors, such as missing spaces after commas and full stops, further reduce clarity. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “Professionals may move abroad because salaries are higher.”

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