Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, a majority of individuals prefer to migrate foreigne countries for better career opportunities and better lifestyle.Some groups of individuals believe that doctors and engineers should working in their own contries where they had finished their trainning;however,others argue that they can work in another countries because they have rights to chose better opportunities for themselves.In this essay I will discuss both the views and my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, there are multiple reasons why doctors and engineers should work in their own contries.First and foremost, they can easily find jobs in their country.In other words, a majority of individuals had completed their graduation trainning in their nation.Also,they know majority of people,if the indivisuals done their trainning in the best hospital with the discipline they can easily find their job in the same hospitals.Moreover,doctors can help to the poor families.To elaborate, some families are come from low income families so they cannot afford medical treatment and medicine.As a result, if doctors can provide free medical treatment to poor families it can benificial for them.

On the other hand, some groups of people believe that they have rights for chose career for themselves.To explain,if doctros and engineers want to work in foreign countries they can becuase they want to earn high salaries and improve their better lifestyle.To add more,if doctors and engineers are living and working in another countries they can get more salaries and they can help their families to provide fanancial assistance.For example, wide range of doctros and engineers are living and working in Canada for the better career and standard lifestyles.

In counclusion, in my opinion, it depence on their choice because they are living in their own nations it can hepl to the poor families to provide free medical serv

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion: the first body paragraph argues that professionals can serve local people, while the second explains that working abroad may bring higher salaries and financial support for family. Your opinion appears in the introduction and conclusion, but it is not fully clear or consistently developed. The conclusion says the decision “depend[s] on their choice,” yet mainly repeats the benefit to poor families, so it does not clearly weigh the two views or explain your position. Some supporting points are also under-developed: for example, the claim that graduates can find work in the hospitals where they trained needs a clearer explanation or example. Develop each main reason and make your final position explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “For example” helps readers follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive or unclear: the first body paragraph moves from job prospects to familiarity with people and then to free treatment without showing how these points connect. Several linking phrases, including “To elaborate” and “To add more,” feel mechanical, and the conclusion is cut off before completing its final idea. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and ensure the conclusion brings the discussion to a complete, logical close.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “career opportunities,” “medical treatment,” “low income families,” and “financial assistance,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “doctors and engineers,” “families,” and “better.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “foreigne,” “contries,” “trainning,” “chose,” and “fanancial,” which can distract the reader. Some collocations are unnatural, for example “provide free medical treatment to poor families” is understandable but could be expressed more precisely in context. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing professional migration, public service, and career choice, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if doctors can provide free medical treatment … it can be beneficial.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Examples include “should working” instead of a correct verb form, “they have rights for chose,” and “some families are come from low income families.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “in another countries” and the missing space or punctuation around several clauses. Practise accurate verb patterns after modal verbs and prepositions, and proofread each sentence for complete clauses and correct agreement.

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