Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Working hard proceeded us to the success. Doctors and engineers are a vital part of our country and society. To become professional in their field they should have to went to training clubs. They spend a big part of their life in becoming great in their field. I agree with both statements.

According to my perspective, I completely agree with that professionals such as doctors and engineers are freely to work in the country of their choice. Due to the fact that they spent their life in become professional so they can go to any country of their choice. For instance, in a country named England required more engineers for their projects. So, engineers are free to go their according to their will. They can fulfill their required things and earn a handsome amount for their expenses.

On the other hand, placing look on some people believe that professionals should be required to do work in the country where they did their training. I partially agree with this. From my opinion, some of the people who are patriot can work in the country they did their training. Some time a country provides training but not a suitable job according to his\her interest so they have to change their country according to their will and pay.

people become professionals to make their life easier and to dull their dreams. Some people judge or suggest people to do this or that. People are freely allowed to do whatever they want to do not to put an ear on others perspective. We are free to do anything in our life. It's on the person that he will choose to stay in the country he took his training or he'll have to change his country. It's his will to do anything.

In short, people can do anything in their life. WE do not have any rights to control them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views and state a preference for professionals to choose where they work, so the response is relevant to the question. The example of England needing engineers gives some support to freedom of movement, and you acknowledge that some people may choose to serve their home country. However, the discussion remains partial: the reasons for requiring trained professionals to stay are not explained, and the point about patriotism is asserted rather than supported. Your opinion also shifts between “I agree with both statements” and strongly defending individual choice, so the position is not consistently clear. Develop the practical arguments on both sides—for example, public investment in training versus professionals’ career opportunities—and state your final view precisely. (The response meets the required length; 9 words copied from the prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the other hand” help signal a change in perspective. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several ideas are repeated rather than developed. The final body paragraph repeats that people are free to choose without adding a distinct reason, while “In short” introduces a conclusion that largely restates this point. Some links between sentences are difficult to follow, and the opening does not clearly lead into the argument. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, explain it, and connect it to a relevant example; use referencing and linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “professionals,” “training,” “patriot,” and “projects,” and the reader can generally identify your main subject. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make meaning less clear. For example, “training clubs” does not convey professional education, “placing look on” is not a natural phrase, and “dull their dreams” appears to express an unintended meaning. “Handsome amount” is also an awkward collocation in this context. Repetition of “country,” “people,” and “free” limits precision. Build a more suitable range for discussing employment and public services, and check collocations and word forms in context. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish working abroad, serving a home country, and meeting workforce needs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “Due to the fact that” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” The main ideas are often understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. Examples include “they should have to went,” “they spent their life in become professional,” and “professionals … are freely to work.” The sentence beginning “Some time a country provides training” also shifts between singular and plural references. Practise accurate past and infinitive forms, subject–verb agreement, and complete sentence patterns. Then proofread for punctuation and capitalisation, particularly the lower-case “people” after a paragraph break and “WE” in the conclusion.

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