Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given ligne graph illustrates information about the number of job in fours sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Overall,its clear that the manufacturing is the most dominat number of jobs with 15 morever, the retail and agriculture are the second considerable number of jobs with 7 whereas,the healthcare accounted the lowest number with 2,5.

Regarding in period between 1960 and 2020,the manufacturing is 15 then it increase in 1980 even 20 then decrease even 13

morever the retail increase from 6 to 16 however, the agriculture decrease from 6 to 2,5 and the healthcare increase from 2,5 to 16 in 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the four sectors and report the broad directions of change: manufacturing rises before falling, retail and healthcare grow, and agriculture declines. However, the overview is not sufficiently accurate or clear: manufacturing is not the dominant sector throughout, and retail and agriculture are not both second in 1960; they are tied at about 6 million. The response also omits key comparisons, such as healthcare catching up with retail at around 16 million by 2020, and gives few intermediate figures. It contains 96 words, below the required 150, so the account is underdeveloped. Add a clear overview and support it with accurate figures at the main years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving to details, and it follows the time period broadly. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several trends are compressed into one long sentence, with little separation between sectors or stages. Linking words such as “morever,” “whereas,” and “however” are repeated or used awkwardly, so the relationships between points are not always clear. Organise the body into clearer comparisons—for example, manufacturing and retail in one paragraph, then agriculture and healthcare—and use transitions only where they accurately show contrast or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “manufacturing,” “retail,” “agriculture,” “healthcare,” “increase,” and “decrease,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, including “most dominat,” “second considerable number,” and “accounted the lowest number.” Spelling errors such as “ligne” and “morever” also make the writing less clear and polished. Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations, such as “the largest number of jobs,” “stood at,” and “rose to.” Check spelling and use sector names consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both an overview and a longer sentence comparing trends, but its grammatical range is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “the manufacturing is 15 then it increase” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear sentence structure; “the healthcare accounted the lowest number” lacks a suitable grammatical pattern; and “the retail increase from 6 to 16” does not maintain the past tense needed for historical data. Punctuation and spacing also make sentence boundaries difficult to identify. Practise writing complete past-tense sentences, with a clear subject and verb, and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation.

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