Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graoh oresents the information about the employments given by US in 1960 and 2020.

Overall, the manufacturing sector gave more jobs across others in 1960 .Healthcare departments issued less jobs then compare to other sectors.Another strong point is that retail and agriculture sectors were on the same position at the end of the chart .

Initially, manufacturing sector was the highest job producer in 1960 also we can see a noticable incease from 15 million to 20 million in 1980 but than the percentaage dropped steadily from 20 to around 17 million .In 1960, retail and agricultue sectors were on the same level but then agriculture deparment produced less jobs then compare to others .

We can see a significiant increased in the employents of retail sector from around 6 million to 16 million in 2020.While the healthcare department was he lowest host country but we can see a sharp development in 1980 because

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including manufacturing’s early lead, its rise to about 20 million in 1980, and the growth of retail. However, the response only partially summarises the graph: the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate comparison, since retail and agriculture are not at the same level in 2020; retail and healthcare are both about 16 million. The account also stops mid-sentence at “because,” leaving healthcare’s strong rise to around 16 million unreported. Agriculture’s decline is mentioned but not described with clear figures or stages. To make the summary more complete, give a concise overview of the contrasting trends and report the main changes across all four sectors accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction and overview, then moves to details about manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare. Basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Initially” and “but then” help show relationships. However, progression is uneven, and the final sentence is unfinished, so the healthcare information is not integrated into a complete account. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “Another strong point” and the comparison that retail and agriculture were “on the same position at the end.” Paragraphing does not clearly separate the overview from the detailed comparisons. Use a complete overview paragraph followed by logically grouped details, and make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “sector,” “million,” “increased,” “dropped” and “sharp development,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or awkward choices make meaning less clear. For example, “employments given by US” and “departments issued less jobs” are not natural ways to describe employment figures, while “lowest host country” appears to be an incorrect phrase for healthcare. Spelling errors such as “graoh,” “noticable” and “agricultue” are also noticeable. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing job numbers and trends, and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, as in “we can see a noticeable increase … but then … dropped.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “manufacturing sector was the highest job producer” without an article, “retail and agriculture sectors were on the same level” without appropriate article use, and “from around 6 million to 16 million in 2020” without a clearly controlled sentence structure. The final clause, “because,” is incomplete. Practise accurate articles, verb forms and complete sentence boundaries, then use a few controlled complex sentences to compare trends.

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