Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graphs shows informition of jobs in four sectors of economy in USA from 1960 to 2020. Number of jobs mentioned in millions in different sectors ( manufcturing,retail,agriculture and healthcare).

Overall, in sector of healthcare and retail the numbers of jobs increased in given time period.Another side agriculture and manufacturing area number of jobs decreased.

Looking at the details, Healthcare sectors jobs in 1960 around 3 millions this sectore sinificantily increased and by the end of time period it was touched almost 16 millions. This sector was provided at 2020 almost highest jobs in USA.

similarly, sector of retail this was started at around 6 millions and in the end of 2020 this sectors touched the 16 millions at this point healthcare and retail sectors at same levels.

Rgarding manufacturing sectors this was the only sector which was started at around 15 millions job providers in USA.This sector in 1980 reached at the peack point 20 millions but from this oint this sector decreased and at the end of period in 2020 only 13 millions .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast: healthcare and retail rise, while manufacturing and agriculture decline, and you report several relevant figures, including manufacturing’s peak of 20 million and its fall to 13 million. The comparison that healthcare and retail both finish at about 16 million is also accurate. However, coverage is incomplete: agriculture is named in the overview but its trend is not described in the details, and the opening healthcare figure is given as around 3 million rather than about 2 million. The overview also says manufacturing decreased overall, although it first rose substantially before falling. To strengthen the response, describe all four series and make the overall pattern more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details, and phrases such as “Overall,” “Looking at the details,” and “similarly” help signal stages in the report. However, progression is uneven: agriculture disappears after the overview, and the final paragraph ends with manufacturing without a concluding comparison. Some links are awkward or unclear, as in “Another side agriculture and manufacturing area,” while the retail and healthcare comparison is split across lines and lacks smooth connection. Grouping the rising sectors together, then the declining sectors, and using clearer transitions would make the information easier to follow. Check that each paragraph develops a distinct, complete part of the graph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “sectors,” “increased,” “decreased,” “reached,” and “millions,” so the main trends can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-form errors are noticeable, such as “informition,” “manufcturing,” “sinificantily,” “peack,” and “oint.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “touched almost 16 millions” and “jobs providers” do not describe the data idiomatically. Use standard chart-reporting collocations such as “rose to,” “stood at,” and “the number of jobs,” and proofread spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish a peak, a decline, and an end-point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use past-tense reporting, for example, “This sector in 1980 reached at the peack point 20 millions but from this oint this sector decreased.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and word order recur. Examples include “The graphs shows,” “Healthcare sectors jobs,” and “this sectors touched the 16 millions.” Several sentences also lack clear grammatical connections or punctuation, particularly “Another side agriculture and manufacturing area number of jobs decreased.” These problems sometimes make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “while” or “whereas,” checking subject–verb agreement and singular/plural forms.

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