Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE DIFFERENT JOBS IN FOUR MODULES OF THE US ECONOMY FROM 1960 TO 2020.

OVERALL, MANUFACTURING IS THE HIGHEST ECONOMY SECTOR ACCOUNTING AROUND 20 MILLIONS, WHILE THE LOWEST ONE IS THE HEALTHCARE HAVING ALMOST 2.5 MILLIONS IN 1960.

ACCORDING TO THIS LINE GRAPH, JOBS RELATED TO HEALTHCARE HAVING INCREASED SIGNIFICANTLY FROM AROUND 2.5 MILLIONS TO ABOUT 16 MILLIONS IN 2020. RETAIL JOBS HAVE ALSO RISED FROM 6 IN 1960 TO JUST ABOVE 15 MILLIONS IN 2020. HOWEVER, AGRICULTURE HAVE ECONOMICALLY DECREASED A LITTLE BIT.

IN 1960, THE TOP OF THE LIST WAS MANUFACTURING SECTOR BUT IT DECREASED UNTIL 2020 TO AROUND 13 MILLIONS. WHILE IN 2020, TOP OF THE LIST BECOMES THE HEALTHCARE FIELD WITH THE HIGHEST ECOMICAL PROPORTION. RETAIL AND HEALTHCARE SECTORS ARE ALMOST EQUAL IN ECONOMY.

TO SUMMARIZE ALL THIS ESSAY, IN 2020, HEALTHCARE AND RETAIL ARE SIGNIFICANTLY INCREASED TOUCHING ALMOST SAME AMOUNT AROUND 16 MILLIONS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main sectors and report several important trends: healthcare and retail rise, agriculture declines, and manufacturing falls after reaching a peak. The comparison between manufacturing’s early lead and healthcare’s position in 2020 is relevant. However, the overview is not fully accurate: manufacturing peaks at about 20 million in 1980, rather than simply “accounting around 20 millions” as a general feature, and healthcare is not the lowest sector in 1960—agriculture is also about 6 million, while healthcare is the lowest at roughly 2 million. The agriculture trend is mentioned but not described with figures or stages, and the claim that retail and healthcare are “almost equal” applies to 2020 but could be stated more precisely. Develop these comparisons more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about rising and falling sectors, with a final summary. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, the final paragraph repeats the point that healthcare and retail reach similar levels in 2020, which has already appeared in the preceding paragraph. Some links are mechanical or unclear: “According to this line graph” and “To summarize all this essay” do not add useful connections, while the opening “While in 2020” creates an incomplete contrast with the previous sentence. Grouping the trends more deliberately—for example, describing the two rising sectors together, then the declining sectors—would improve progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increased significantly,” “decreased,” “highest,” and “lowest,” so the main information is generally understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this chart: “four modules” should be “four sectors,” “economic proportion” does not describe a number of jobs, and “touching almost same amount” is an awkward way to express similar totals. There are also spelling errors such as “RISED” and “ECOMICAL,” and repeated use of “top of the list” and “economy” limits precision. Aim for standard chart language such as “rose,” “fell,” “peaked at,” and “accounted for,” while checking spelling and choosing nouns that match the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “However” and a time clause beginning “While in 2020.” The main trends can usually be understood, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “Healthcare having increased” needs a finite verb (“Healthcare jobs increased”), and “Agriculture have … decreased” has subject–verb disagreement. Articles and number forms are also inconsistent in “the lowest one is the healthcare” and “20 millions”; use “healthcare had the lowest figure” and “20 million.” The sentence beginning “While in 2020” is incomplete, and “Retail and healthcare sectors are almost equal in economy” lacks a clear grammatical relationship. Practise complete clauses, agreement, and concise comparisons.

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