Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line chart illustrates changes in number of jobs in millions in four different field among the US between 1960 and 2020.

At the beginning of the period Manufacturing stood at 15 millions. It then rose to 20 millions in 1980. After that it was decreased in the whole tenure at the end it was approx 12 millions. Agriculture had almost similar data, In 1960 it started at 6 millions and in 1980 it was decreased which was less than 5 millions, it was stable in 2000 and in 2020 it showed a slightly fell.

Meanwhile, the figure for Retail and Healthcare continuesly increased throughout the whole time period. In 1960 around 6 millions jobs in retail. After that it took dramatic increase till 2000 at 15 millions jobs and in 2020 it reached to around 16 millions. Furthermore in healthcare it started at approx 3 millions and it had escalate every given year, by the end of period it reached at 12 millions, similar to retail.

Overall, it is clear that the figure for Manufacturing decreased mostly. While Retails and Healthcare followed the opposite pattern. Additionally, Agriculture recorded steadily and then marginally decrease.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all four sectors and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the similar end-point for Retail and Healthcare. However, the report could be improved by being more precise with the data points. For instance, stating 'Manufacturing stood at 15 millions' is slightly inaccurate as the graph shows 15 million jobs, and 'it was decreased' is grammatically awkward. To reach a higher band, ensure that your descriptions of trends are more precise and that you avoid minor inaccuracies when reporting specific figures from the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into four paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information easily. You use some cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile', 'Furthermore', and 'Overall' to link your ideas. However, the transition between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing could be more sophisticated. For example, 'Agriculture had almost similar data' is a bit vague. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that your sentences flow more naturally into one another would strengthen the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points of the graph, using terms like 'dramatic increase', 'stable', and 'marginally'. However, there are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'it showed a slightly fell' (should be 'a slight fall') and 'continuesly' (spelling error). Additionally, some phrasing is repetitive. To improve, try to use a wider range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and pay closer attention to word forms to ensure your writing sounds more professional and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'number of jobs in four different field' (should be 'fields'), 'it was decreased' (passive voice error), and 'it had escalate' (should be 'it had escalated'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading, particularly regarding verb tenses and subject-verb agreement.

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