Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The multiple line chart illustrates the amount of jobs in four different sectors of the US economy over the time period between 1960 and 2020.
Overall, healthcare and retail sector had a significant increase in number of jobs while agriculture and manufacturing sector experience lower points. Healthcare sector had the highest growth over the time and agriculture had the least growth.
Manufacturing sector created 15 millions of job in the year of 1960 which had significant increase of 5 million and the number grew to 20 millions in year 1980 later on jobs kept declining and reached all time low till the year 2020 to 13 millions. Jobs in healthcare sector experienced highest growth starting from 2 million reaching 5 millions in 1980 which kept increasing and achieved all time high just above 15 millions in year of 2020.
Agriculture had continuous downfall in providing jobs number fell to 4 million jobs from 6 millions and followed same and fell to all time low 2 million jobs only in the year 2020. Retail sector also had steady growth over the years starting from just above 5 millions to reaching almost double in 1980 and continued to grow with same speed touching 15 million in the year 2000 furthermore it recorded highest number in year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all four sectors and identifies key trends such as the growth in healthcare and retail versus the decline in agriculture and manufacturing. The overview is clear and highlights the main features effectively. However, some data points are slightly inaccurate or imprecise, such as stating manufacturing reached 20 million in 1980 when the graph shows a peak earlier, or describing the retail sector's growth as 'same speed' when the rate of change clearly fluctuates. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that trends are described with more nuanced vocabulary to reflect the actual visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Each paragraph focuses on a specific set of trends, which helps the reader follow the progression of information. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'furthermore' and 'overall', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect the data points more fluidly rather than listing them in a sequence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe trends like 'significant increase', 'continuous downfall', and 'all time low'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'amount of jobs' (should be 'number of jobs') and '15 millions of job' (should be '15 million jobs'). The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, but it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Improving the use of synonyms and avoiding repetitive phrasing would enhance the lexical quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with pluralization ('15 millions', '5 millions') and article usage ('in year of 1960'). There are also issues with verb tense consistency and missing prepositions. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.
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