Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The provided line graph delineates data regarding the changes in the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US over a sixty-year period spanning from 1960 to 2020.
Overall, it is immediately salient that healthcare experienced a remarkable upward trend, whereas the converse was true for agriculture, which witnessed a steady decline throughout the timescale. Additionally, the most dramatic growth was registered in healthcare.
In terms of the detailed statistics, healthcare commenced at approximately 2 million in 1960 and subsequently surged dramatically to reach a peak of 16 million in 2020. Following this exponential growth, the figures plateaued consistently at this high for the remainder of the period. Likewise, retail started at 6 million in 1960 and then increased significantly to 16 million over the period.
By striking contrast, agriculture followed a completely inverted trajectory. The data plummeted sharply from 6 million in 1960, before hitting a rock-bottom of merely 2 million in 2020. Thereafter, this category experienced wild fluctuations until the final year. Similarly, manufacturing started at 15 million in 1960 and then decreased minimally to 13 million over the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
Siz asosiy tendensiyalarni muvaffaqiyatli aniqladingiz va ma’lumotlarning aniq umumiy sharhini taqdim etdingiz. Siz barcha to‘rtta sektorni qamrab oldingiz va sog‘liqni saqlash sohasidagi o‘sishni qishloq xo‘jaligidagi pasayish bilan taqqoslash kabi tegishli solishtirishlarni amalga oshirdingiz. Biroq, ma’lumotlarni talqin qilishda ba’zi noaniqliklar mavjud. Masalan, siz sog‘liqni saqlash sohasi 2020-yildan keyin 'plateaued consistently' deb yozgansiz, ammo grafik 2020-yilda tugaydi va siz qishloq xo‘jaligi oxirgi yilgacha 'wild fluctuations' boshdan kechirganini tasvirlaysiz, bu esa taqdim etilgan vizual ma’lumotlar bilan tasdiqlanmaydi. Faktlarni noto‘g‘ri talqin qilmaslik uchun tavsiflaringiz taqdim etilgan grafikga qat’iy mos kelishiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
Javob mantiqiy jihatdan aniq kirish, umumiy sharh va ma’lumotlarni samarali guruhlaydigan asosiy qismlar bilan tashkil etilgan. Siz o‘quvchini ma’lumotlar bo‘ylab yo‘naltirish uchun 'In terms of', 'By striking contrast' va 'Likewise' kabi bog‘lovchi vositalardan foydalangansiz. Xatboshilarga ajratish o‘rinli va g‘oyalarning rivojlanishi odatda ravon. Yuqoriroq band balliga erishish uchun gaplar o‘rtasidagi o‘tish har doim tabiiy bo‘lishini va mantiqiy oqim kichik faktik nomuvofiqliklar tufayli buzilmasligini ta’minlang.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Siz 'delineates', 'salient', 'exponential' va 'trajectory' kabi murakkab atamalardan foydalanib, boy lug‘at boyligini namoyish etasiz. Bu uslubni hisobga olgan holda kamroq uchraydigan leksik birliklardan foydalanish qobiliyatini ko‘rsatadi. Ba’zida kollokatsiya yoki so‘z tanlashda kichik muammolar uchraydi, masalan, 'rock-bottom of merely 2 million' iborasi akademik hisobot uchun biroz norasmiy. Umuman olganda, lug‘at boyligingiz javob davomida nazarda tutilgan ma’noni aniq va samarali yetkazish uchun yetarli darajada aniq.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
Yozgan matningizda ergash gaplar ('whereas the converse was true for agriculture, which witnessed...') va sifatdoshli iboralar kabi murakkab gap tuzilmalarining yaxshi xilma-xilligi namoyon bo‘ladi. Grammatika odatda to‘g‘ri va gaplaringizning aksariyati xatosiz. Tinish belgilari dalillaringiz tuzilishini qo‘llab-quvvatlash uchun to‘g‘ri ishlatilgan. Muloqotga to‘sqinlik qiladigan jiddiy xatolar yo‘q va murakkab shakllarni boshqarishingiz matn davomida izchil.
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