Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this graph illustrates the graphic information about the job in the four decade of the economy in the US and shows the different line parameters..

First of all there are four sectors like manufacture, retail, agriculture and healthcare. In this graph first health care jobs are started in the 1960 and this graph shows that in this jobs people have more interest in this field. But at the same time agriculture and retail jobs started on the same point like on appropriate on the 6 millions jobs have economy in the US. But at the same time 15 millions jobs started in manufacture and in 1980 peoples have interest increased 20 millions after the 1980. In the after 1980 healthcare and agriculture jobs had increased in the same time toward 2000. But at the point of 2000 agriculture are same as it is before in the 1980 and on the other hand manufacture jobs decreases respectively at the point of 2020. But at the same time retailer and healthcare increases at the same point from 2020 on the 15 millions. So in this paragraph indicates that retailer and healthcare have more economy sectors in the US.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to clearly identify the main trends or provide a coherent overview. The description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate, such as stating that healthcare and agriculture started at the same point in 1960, which is not supported by the graph. The report lacks a clear summary of the overall trends, and the comparisons between sectors are poorly articulated. The information is presented in a fragmented way, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key features of the economic changes over the 60-year period. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant changes, such as the decline of manufacturing versus the growth of healthcare.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'First of all' and 'But at the same time', these are often used incorrectly or repetitively, which hinders the flow of information. Paragraphing is insufficient, as the entire response is essentially one long, disjointed block of text. The referencing is also unclear; for example, the phrase 'in this jobs' and 'in the after 1980' are confusing and make it difficult to follow the timeline of events. The overall structure is mechanical rather than logical, failing to guide the reader through the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There is frequent misuse of basic terms, such as 'graphic information' instead of 'graphical information' or 'data', and 'retailer' instead of 'retail sector'. The student struggles with collocations, for example, 'peoples have interest increased' and 'same as it is before'. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', or 'significant decline'. The repetition of phrases like 'at the same time' and 'at the point of' further limits the lexical variety and precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('agriculture are same'), incorrect preposition usage ('in the 1960'), and awkward sentence construction ('In this graph first health care jobs are started'). The student relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary full stops and missing commas. The lack of control over basic grammatical structures significantly impacts the clarity of the report, preventing it from reaching a higher band score.

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