Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the recorded frequency of jobs under the duration of 60 years in different four economical sectors like Manufacturing , Retails , Agriculture , and healthcare .
The manufacturing rate is registered at the surged in 1990 after that year it started decline gradually .Moreover in the terms of Agriculture initially it is it is equivalent to retails after that is it started reducing and continue to decline till 1990 and then the number of jobs remained constant with marginal change from 2000 to 2020.
However in the case of retails it is registered that at the very first time the frequency of employment reached to 6 million after that is abruptly plummet in 2000 the number of workers reached to 15 million then it continue stay constant till 2020.
On the other hand initially there were about 2 million job holders in health care center which is recorded as very less then other sectors with the passage of time is start increasing
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing trends in four sectors. However, it fails to provide a clear overview or summary of the main features, which is a requirement for Task 1. The description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., stating manufacturing surged in 1990, which does not align with typical graph interpretations). Furthermore, the response lacks a concluding summary and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the sectors. The information is presented in a fragmented way, and the lack of precision in reporting the data points significantly limits the achievement of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'Moreover in the terms of' and 'However in the case of'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends being described. There is no clear overall structure, and the transition between the description of different sectors feels disjointed rather than flowing logically. The lack of clear signposting makes the information difficult to navigate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'recorded frequency of jobs', 'economical sectors', and 'very less'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing trends, opting for phrases like 'start increasing' or 'abruptly plummet' without the necessary grammatical support. Spelling errors, such as 'Retails' instead of 'Retail', also detract from the overall quality. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('it is it is equivalent'), incorrect tense usage ('is start increasing'), and awkward sentence construction. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are often marred by punctuation errors and missing articles. The control over basic grammar is inconsistent, and the errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader in understanding the intended meaning of the data trends.
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