Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Figure gives the information about four different types of work that is manufacturing,Retail, Agriculture and Healthcare in US from 1960 to 2020.
As we can see that the healthcare has risen from the year 1960 untill 2020.. where as Agricultural has decreased in the year 1980 to 2020.when we see manufacturing it has risen for some extent from 1960 to 1980 the the ratio of manufacturing has decreased in the 1980 till 2020, only the healthcare and retail jobs in US are increasing compare to Agriculture and Manufacturing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student identifies the four sectors and provides a basic overview of trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to report main features effectively. There is no clear attempt to compare the data points in a meaningful way, and the lack of length prevents the development of a coherent summary. To improve, the student must provide a more comprehensive overview, include specific data points from the graph, and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for organizing information in an IELTS Task 1 report. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and repetitive (e.g., 'as we can see', 'when we see'). The progression of information is not logical, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends described. To improve, the student should structure the response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific trends and comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on simple verbs like 'risen' and 'decreased'. There is little evidence of the range of vocabulary required to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'remained stable'). Some word choices are imprecise, such as 'ratio of manufacturing', which does not accurately describe the number of jobs. To improve, the student should learn and apply topic-specific vocabulary related to data trends and economic sectors to demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in US'), incorrect prepositions ('to some extent' vs 'for some extent'), and punctuation issues (double periods). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. There are also errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, correct article usage, and the accurate application of tenses when describing past and ongoing trends.
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