Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this figures shows about the information different sectors of job of us economy by the start of 1960 and the end of 2020

in y axis jobs are shown in number of millions and x axis is labeled by years

jobs in manfacturing is maintaining an all time high but it decrease from 1980 and goes down gradually 5 million jobs was held for agriculture but it has a slight decrease and continues its down trend no fluctuation was seemed by the end of 2020 while retailers and healthcare economys has seemed a great competition both of these economy's rose until the manfucturing goes down from both but still manfacturing has a good job opportunities between 15-10 million while the retailer and healthcare economy's just hit the 15 million job according to the figure it is clear that these both economy's increased and no fall has been seen by the end of 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends effectively. While it mentions the four sectors, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that manufacturing maintained an 'all time high' while simultaneously noting a decrease is contradictory. The report lacks a clear structure, and the comparison between sectors is underdeveloped. To improve, you should focus on identifying the starting and ending points for each category and clearly contrasting the growth of healthcare and retail against the decline of manufacturing and agriculture.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and clauses, resulting in a series of disjointed statements. The use of referencing is also weak; for instance, the phrase 'these both economy's' is unclear and repetitive. To reach a higher band, you must organize your response into logical paragraphs—typically an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs—and use linking words like 'whereas,' 'in contrast,' or 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'economy's' incorrectly when referring to job sectors, and there are several spelling errors such as 'manfacturing' and 'manfucturing.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends precisely; for example, instead of saying 'goes down gradually,' you could use 'experienced a steady decline.' To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'upward trend,' 'significant growth,' or 'sharp decline,' and ensure you use the correct terminology for the sectors provided in the prompt.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('this figures shows'), incorrect pluralization ('economy's'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple and often lack proper punctuation, which makes the text feel fragmented. There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practice using complex sentences with subordinating conjunctions like 'although' or 'while' to connect related ideas more effectively.

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