Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph shows information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the us last 60 years graph shows jobs in millions, the manufacturing labour is grows 15 millions and hit 20 millions in 1960 to 1980, than Retail jobs is started in 1960 it is 06 millions and last 60 years it is hit 16 millions which is repeatedly up in 1960 to 2020, Agriculture jobs from started 06 millions and rose down 1960 to 1980 and also in 1980 to 2020 jobs gose dumped in last 60 years, The last jobs in us 1960 to 2020 is HEALTHCARE in 1960 its economy it is 3 millions jobs and grows every last 20 years and in 60 years hospital jobs hit 16 millions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you identify the four sectors and provide some data points, the overview is missing, and the information is presented as a list of facts rather than a cohesive summary. The analysis is under-developed, and the lack of a clear structure makes it difficult to identify the main trends or make meaningful comparisons between the sectors. To improve, ensure you include an introductory sentence, a clear overview of the main trends, and sufficient detail to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a clear report. The sentences are linked in a repetitive and mechanical way, often using 'and' or 'in 1960 to 1980' to connect ideas. There is no clear logical progression between the sectors, and the lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel like a series of disjointed points rather than a unified summary. To improve, use paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and incorporate a wider range of linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently'.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'grows', 'hit', and 'started'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'labour is grows' and 'jobs gose dumped', which are grammatically incorrect and imprecise. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends in a graph effectively. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing data, such as 'experienced a steady increase', 'reached a peak of', or 'witnessed a significant decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('manufacturing labour is grows'), incorrect verb forms ('jobs gose dumped'), and missing articles or prepositions ('in us 1960 to 2020'). The sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation, making the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and using correct verb tenses for describing past data. Proofreading for basic errors is also essential.

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