Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The Bar Chart Shows information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

These four economy sectors carries separate individually of Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture & Healthcare.

As shown in the graph in the year 1960 the healthcare sector job ratio has been hiked in 2020, where areas retails sector was also on the same level.

but in 1960 the manufacturing in the year 1960 there was 15 millions jobs available got rapid increase in demand in year of 1980 after it has been observed it got fallen since 2000 to 2020.

However, there was no movement growth shown in Agriculture sectors in 1960 only it got increased by 5% again fallen down.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the four sectors, the description of the data is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. You have not provided sufficient detail or accurate comparisons between the sectors over the 60-year period. For example, the statement regarding the healthcare sector is unclear, and the analysis of the manufacturing sector is confusing due to grammatical errors. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the overall trends and support your points with specific, accurate data points from the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. While you attempt to use cohesive devices like 'However' and 'As shown in the graph', they are used incorrectly or do not effectively link the sentences. The lack of a clear introduction, body, and conclusion makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, organize your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Use transition words more naturally to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'job ratio has been hiked' and 'no movement growth' are unnatural and do not accurately describe the data. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'carries separate individually', which is grammatically incorrect and confusing. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use precise terms for describing trends (e.g., 'increased', 'fallen'). To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'witnessed a steady decline' or 'experienced a significant surge'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'These four economy sectors carries'), tense usage (e.g., 'has been hiked in 2020'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to read. For instance, 'but in 1960 the manufacturing in the year 1960 there was 15 millions jobs' is repetitive and poorly constructed. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using consistent tenses when describing past data.

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