Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The jobs sector in every country effecting greatly. It depends on the economy of country. How much it is strong?

By analysing the graph,the jobs in. Manufacturing sector started in 1960 increases gradually and reached at peak in 29 million people got the jobs till 1980 in this sector. By that the rate of jobs starts decreasing manually and by 2000 it was a little bit more than it was started. After that it started decreasing.

In the retail,the prices go increasing with the peak at 15 millions.

If we talk about agriculture sector , the jobs rate decreasing by 1980 the lines goes downward and reach its lowest point till 2020. The health care survey shows that from 1980 to 2020 it increased gradually and not decreased in any point of any sector so it's a positive point which shows the millions of people paid attention towards this issue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or identify the most significant trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and some data points are inaccurate or poorly described (e.g., mentioning 'prices' in the retail sector, which is not supported by the graph). The report lacks a logical structure, and the comparison between sectors is underdeveloped. To improve, you must provide a clear summary of the main trends and ensure that the data reported matches the visual information provided in the graph accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. The introduction is irrelevant to the task, and the body paragraphs are not logically organized. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the progression of information difficult to follow. For example, the transition between the manufacturing and retail sectors is abrupt. To achieve a higher band, you should use clear paragraphing—one for the overview and one or two for the detailed analysis—and use linking words like 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often misused. Phrases like 'jobs sector in every country effecting greatly' and 'manually' (likely meant 'gradually') indicate a lack of precision. The use of 'prices' instead of 'number of jobs' in the retail section is a significant error. You need to use more precise terminology related to trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'experienced a sharp decline.' Expanding your range of vocabulary to include specific reporting verbs and nouns will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the jobs... increases'), sentence fragments ('How much it is strong?'), and incorrect tense usage. The sentence structures are simple and often lack the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Additionally, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, while ensuring they are used accurately.

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