Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph gives information the number of worker in different four sectors of healthcare agraculatre retail menefachring in economy in the year 1960 and 2020

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the graph. The student misinterprets the information, confusing job sectors with 'spending' and providing inaccurate figures that do not reflect the trends shown (e.g., claiming manufacturing increased from 12% to 15% when the graph shows a decline). The overview is unclear and does not identify the main trends or significant comparisons. The response lacks a clear summary of the key features, such as the growth in healthcare or the decline in agriculture. Consequently, the response does not address the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. Paragraphing is absent or misused, and the sentences are disjointed, making it difficult to follow the writer's intent. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'these' is used repeatedly without a clear antecedent). The overall structure is chaotic, and the information is not arranged in a way that facilitates a clear summary of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'agraculatre', 'menefachring', 'reatail', 'reasion') and word choice errors that impede communication. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data trends, instead using informal or incorrect phrases like 'eating thing' or 'discovery the years'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the frequent errors make the text difficult to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. Sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on, and there is a lack of control over basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and article placement. For example, 'The graph gives information the number of worker' is grammatically incorrect. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, leading to confusion. The high frequency of errors significantly impacts the reader's ability to understand the intended message.

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