Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrate the total number of jobs in four sectors of economy such as manufacturing,Retail,Agriculture,Healthcare in united states in the years between 1960 to 2020. Jobs are in millions.

Overall,the line graph represented that the retail and healthcare are increasing gradually while manufacturing line is increased first and then decreased continuously.On the other hand,retail is decreased first but remained same after a while

The manufacturing and healthcare lines are increasing smoothly.in 1980,the healthcare line is at 5 million but manufacturing line is at 10 million.They continue to increase and in the end,the manufacturing line reaches a bit higher than 15 million while healthcare reaches the same point as the retail line in year 2020

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you identified the main sectors, the description of trends is incomplete and lacks sufficient detail. The summary is cut off mid-sentence, preventing a full overview of the data. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the graph are described, including key data points and comparisons, and provide a complete, well-developed response that meets the length requirement. Currently, the analysis is too brief to provide a clear picture of the trends over the 60-year period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is fragmented and lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of a conclusion and the abrupt ending hinder the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes inaccurately, such as the repetitive use of 'line' and 'the'. Paragraphing is present but the content within the paragraphs is not well-organized. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'increasing', 'decreasing', and 'line'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or precise terminology related to data description. Additionally, there are errors in capitalization (e.g., 'united states', 'Retail', 'Agriculture') and basic word choice. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'a significant rise'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help make your writing more professional and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph illustrate'), missing articles (e.g., 'in united states'), and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'retail is decreased'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and the lack of complex sentences limits your ability to demonstrate grammatical range. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.

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