Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The give graph illustrate the information of jobs in four sectors of economy in US in the time of 1960 to 2020.

Overall, there are four sectors are given Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture,and Healthcare. There is increase seen in retail and health care departments, on the other hand downfall was seen in Manufacturing and agriculture department after 1980.

At the begging in 1960 manufacturing division produce higher job than all

units it was peak in 1980 after 1980 decrease was seen and it reach 13m in 2020 but in peak time this was produce 20M jobs. Retail job was started from 5M and and after small increase by years it reach ON 15M IN THE TIME OF 2020.

However on the other hand continually increase was seen in healthcare till 2020 it started from 3M and reach 17M till 2020. At the end little up and down was seen in farming departments it started from 5m and reach

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the four sectors and describing the general trends. However, the analysis is incomplete. The final sentence regarding the agriculture sector is cut off mid-sentence, which means the data for that sector is not fully reported. Additionally, while the overview identifies the main trends, the comparison between sectors could be more developed. The response provides some specific data points, such as the peak of manufacturing at 20M and the growth of healthcare to 17M, but the lack of completion in the final paragraph significantly impacts the overall task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'At the begging' (beginning) and 'However on the other hand'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where the sentence structure breaks down. While there is an attempt to group information by sector, the lack of smooth transitions between sentences and the incomplete final thought hinder the overall flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'produce'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'departments' used to describe economic sectors, and 'at the begging' instead of 'at the beginning'. The phrasing 'in the time of 2020' is unnatural. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning of the graph, it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band score. More varied terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated' or 'remained stable', would improve the quality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'The give graph illustrate' and 'there are four sectors are given'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas and inconsistent capitalisation. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors, such as 'it was peak in 1980 after 1980 decrease was seen'. The incomplete final sentence is a major grammatical failure. Overall, the control of grammar is weak, and the errors are frequent throughout the text.

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