Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of jobs related to five different sectors, played a crucial role in the U.S economy between 1960 and 2020.
Overall, the number of agricultural jobs were less over the entire period of time, where as healthcare and retailing sector grew rapidly during the given time period.
In 1960, manfacturing sector had maximum contribution in the U.s economy, with 15 miilion job hike in this sector co
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the task achievement score. Because the text is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to provide a full overview or a detailed report of the main features shown in the graph. Only a few data points are mentioned, and the analysis is not developed. To improve, you must ensure you complete the task by covering all sectors mentioned in the prompt and providing a clear, structured summary that meets the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too short to demonstrate a coherent structure or effective paragraphing. While there is a brief attempt at an introduction and an overview, the abrupt ending prevents any logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal, and the lack of a complete response makes it impossible to assess the flow of information effectively. To improve, focus on writing a clear introduction, a distinct overview paragraph, and at least two body paragraphs that compare the data points logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and contains several errors, such as 'manfacturing' (spelling) and '15 miilion job hike' (incorrect collocation). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'experienced a significant decline.' Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will help you describe the data more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is weak, with noticeable errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'the number of agricultural jobs were' (should be 'was'). There are also punctuation and spelling errors, such as 'U.s' and 'manfacturing'. The sentence structures are simple and the text is incomplete, which limits the assessment of your grammatical range. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentences are complete and punctuated correctly before attempting more complex structures.
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