Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graphs illustrate a historic data for the job market's of the economy in the year ranging from [redacted phone] where " Retails and Healthcare" are always may have gained a steady growth but " Manufacturing and Agriculture" have steep decline.

As U.S is a growing economy retails and healthcare are their backbone always if we talk about the greatest entrepreneur or the greatest surgeon America's has all of them. But at this point when America is a developed nations we can clearly see that Manufacturing has come to halt with almost slow development in the new infrastructure. whereas, If we talk about Agriculture people are loosing interest because no body wants to carry out their legacy skills any further or it is consider as more laborious work.

For a growing nation like US government should be focusing on all the factors to keep social and economical measures balance up. This will help up to boost their wealth even further. All social economical factor should be treated equally to strengthen the backbone of great nation like US.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of objectively summarizing the data from the graph, the response provides subjective commentary and personal opinions about the US economy, such as discussing 'greatest entrepreneurs' and 'surgeons'. The task requires a neutral description of trends, such as the growth in Retail and Healthcare and the decline in Manufacturing and Agriculture. The student does not provide specific data points or clear comparisons of the trends over the 60-year period. Consequently, the response does not address the core task of reporting main features and making relevant comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is illogical for a data report. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is weak, and the final paragraph introduces irrelevant recommendations for the government rather than summarizing the data. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'If we talk about'. The lack of a clear overview or logical grouping of data makes the response difficult to follow as a report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'historic data' instead of 'historical data', 'loosing' instead of 'losing', and 'economical' used where 'economic' is required. The language is informal and subjective, which is unsuitable for this task type. While the student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary, the lack of precision and the frequent errors in word formation and collocation significantly hinder the professional tone required for IELTS Academic writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('This graphs illustrate', 'America's has all of them'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures ('retail and healthcare are their backbone always'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of quotation marks and commas. The range of structures is limited, and the errors are persistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors is high, preventing the response from reaching a higher band.

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