Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors manufacture, retail, agriculture , healthcare of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020 . the data is calibrated in millions.

overall , the range of people working in manufacturing field is high than others and rose up after some years but then its comes down . beside this in retail field people not such intrested into starting but after some years its climbed up and so many people got work into this field . The noticeable field is agriculture its on low rate when its begin but in the end its grow fastly . But into healthcare field not such people able to get job .

Into 1960 in manufacturing field their are 15 million jobs and after 20 years its added more 5 million but unfortunately its goes down till 2020 and only 13 million are left in this field . Retail field give their best in market its just on 5 million in 1960 but after years by years its grows quickly and almost gives 15 million jobs .

Agrticlture had bad impact its on 6 million into 1960 but by the years its comes low and just left 2-3 miilion jobs beside this Healthcare improved and give open vaccancy into `1960. its just 2-3 million but its climbed up fastly and till 2020 their are 15 million jobs in this sector.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all four sectors and provides a general overview, though the overview is somewhat inaccurate regarding the trends (e.g., claiming agriculture grew fastly, when the graph shows a decline). The data reporting is inconsistent; for instance, the description of manufacturing trends is confusing, and the figures cited for agriculture and healthcare are sometimes imprecise or contradictory to the visual data. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the inclusion of inaccurate trends prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that data points are read accurately from the axes and that the summary reflects the actual direction of the trends shown in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'beside this' and 'into 1960'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between sectors is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which sector is being discussed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Subsequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that flows naturally from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'field', 'jobs', and 'grow'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'calibrated in millions', 'give their best in market', and 'give open vaccancy'. Spelling errors are frequent, including 'intrested', 'fastly', 'Agrticlture', and 'vaccancy'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined steadily') and ensure accurate spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('its comes down', 'their are 15 million'), incorrect preposition usage ('into 1960', 'work into this field'), and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and capitalization. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the clarity of the writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of tenses when describing past data.

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