Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this report, it's a graph which indicate about jobs in the four sectors of the economy in the US, [redacted phone]. In this graph, we can indicate that manufacturing in 1960 to 1980 was peak of manufacturing, but in 1980 till 2020 there is quite decrease in income, whereas in retail we can notice through graph that this job need has increased from past till now. However, in agriculture rate of jobs from 6 million it reached 2 millions in 2020, were we can see clear drop of jobs. At the end, it's healthcare jobs which actually rise from 1960s till 20s that number of jobs increase from two million to 15 million. It shows that with the period of time healthcare need is much more than others job. In conclusion, i would highlight that all jobs need increased and decreased with the need of people with respect time and year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by identifying the four sectors and describing the general trends. However, the analysis is superficial and lacks precision. For example, stating 'manufacturing in 1960 to 1980 was peak' is vague, and the description of the healthcare sector as rising 'till 20s' is inaccurate and confusing. The report fails to provide a clear overview or highlight significant comparative features, such as the crossover points or the relative scale of the sectors. The conclusion is generic and does not synthesize the data effectively. To improve, you should focus on selecting key data points (start, end, and peaks) to support your descriptions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into a single paragraph, which is not ideal for an Academic Task 1 report. While there is a basic attempt at logical progression, the lack of paragraphing makes the text feel cluttered. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or misused, such as 'In this graph, we can indicate' and 'At the end'. The flow between sentences is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the four sectors smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'indicate', 'increase', and 'decrease' without variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation; for example, 'job need' is not standard English, and 'income' is used incorrectly to describe the number of jobs in manufacturing. The phrasing 'with the period of time' is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'surge', or 'plateau', and ensure that terms are used in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('it's a graph which indicate'), article usage ('in agriculture rate of jobs'), and tense consistency. Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity, such as 'were we can see clear drop of jobs'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and using articles appropriately before nouns.

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