Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

According to this graph this shows job culture in usa since 1960 to 2026 . There are four types of jobs manufacturing, retail, agriculture, healthcare.

In filed of manufacturing in 1960 there is near 15 and in year 1980 elevate to 20 in year 2000 its adain decrease about 17 and in year 2020 it is in descending order about less the in year 1960 .

Let's talk about retails this in year 1960 is about 5 and in year 1980 about 10 and in year 2000 elevated 15 and again took and advantage of 3 percent in year 2020.

Now we talk about Agriculture factor in year 1960 it about 5 percent and in year 1980 it's about 3 same in year 2000 and it not took and advantage so less than 3 also in year 2020.

Last but not least in healthcare . In this there is magnificent increase from year 1960 to 2020 in 1960 it's about 3 and year 1980 it's took escalation to 5 then about 13 and then 15 in year 2020

So most of beneficial and advantage factor jobs in all four of this is healthcare

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all four sectors mentioned in the graph, but the reporting of data is inconsistent and lacks precision. While you identify trends, the description of figures is often vague (e.g., 'near 15', 'about 10'). Furthermore, the overview is missing; a successful response must highlight the most significant trends, such as the overall growth in healthcare versus the decline in agriculture, rather than just listing data points. The inclusion of '2026' in the introduction is factually incorrect based on the provided graph, which ends in 2020. To improve, focus on grouping the data logically and providing a clear summary of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical or unnatural, such as 'Let's talk about' and 'Last but not least'. These phrases are too informal for an Academic Task 1 report. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is somewhat repetitive, relying heavily on listing years and figures without using linking words to show relationships or comparisons between the sectors. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring smoother flow between sentences would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'is', 'elevate', and 'took an advantage', which are often used incorrectly in this context. For example, 'took an advantage' is not an appropriate way to describe a numerical increase. There is also a lack of precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data analysis and ensure that words are used in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this shows job culture'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'In filed of'), and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'it not took and advantage'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. You should focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, ensuring correct verb tenses, and improving punctuation to reduce the frequency of errors.

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