Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph gives information about the united states economy in four sector of work for six decades between 1960 and 2020. the jobs are in millions.

following the line graph, healthcare have least job economy following the year 1980s manufacturing had the highest economy individual throughout the year respectively,

after two decades agriculture had decline in economy by four millions and following same year retail had gradual increase up to ten million economy.

Between 2 decades , 2000 and 2020 we can illustrate agriculture was having challenges and it went declining rate through out different year, similarly manufacturing also got reduced by sixteen million and retailed had vice versa , retail got very impacted on the united states on breaking the economy and healthcare also aid in increasing economies, between two decades both healthcare and retailed had sixteen million jobs opportunities in united states.

manufacturing was having difficult time during two decades, 2000 and 2020 it firmly decreased from sixteen million to thirteen million,

Overall the data of six decades shows how retail and healthcare were increasing and manufacturing and agriculture gradually decreasing via years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles to accurately report the main features. The description of the trends is often confusing, such as the claim that 'healthcare have least job economy' or the unclear references to 'economy' instead of 'number of jobs'. While the response covers the four sectors, the data interpretation is frequently inaccurate or difficult to follow. The overview is present but lacks the precision required to clearly highlight the key trends, such as the significant growth in healthcare and retail versus the decline in agriculture and manufacturing. To improve, focus on accurately identifying the starting and ending points and describing the overall trajectory of each sector clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphing is inconsistent, and the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'following the line graph' or 'after two decades'. The transition between sentences is frequently abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. There is a lack of clear referencing, and the structure of the report does not effectively guide the reader through the information. To improve, use clear linking words to connect ideas and ensure each paragraph has a distinct focus, such as grouping the increasing sectors together and the decreasing sectors together.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. The student repeatedly uses the word 'economy' when referring to 'jobs' or 'employment numbers', which leads to confusion. Phrases like 'retail had vice versa' and 'retail got very impacted on the united states on breaking the economy' are unnatural and imprecise. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends or data. To improve, learn specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'experienced a steady decline', 'reached a peak', or 'showed a significant upward trend', and ensure terms are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'healthcare have', 'agriculture had decline'), incorrect tense usage, and poor sentence structure. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and misused commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are often poorly constructed. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice proofreading to correct common errors in tense and pluralization.

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