Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph provided gives the information about the amount of jobs in various field of US from 1960 to 2020 in the million amount figure.
To initiate with the year 1960, the retail and the agriculture sectors were at the same point about more than 5 millions job amount. After that this retail field had shown increment from that year to 2020 and the field of agriculture has described steady drop during 1980 to 2020 near around more than 15 millions and 2 millions, respectively.
At the end of the year 2020, healthcare field had reached at some up from 15 millions at the similar position of retail field. That field had started from only 2 after 5 and after 10 million and finally at more than 15 millions job figure. The manufacturing field indicated first increase in between [redacted phone] and sudden downfall to 2020 for less than 15 from exact 15 million job chances.
To sum up, only retail and healthcare field illustrates the rise as compare to other two.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all four sectors mentioned in the graph, but the reporting of data is often unclear or inaccurate. For example, stating that agriculture had a 'steady drop... near around more than 15 millions and 2 millions' is confusing and does not accurately reflect the trends shown. The overview is very brief and lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the overall decline in manufacturing versus the growth in healthcare. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in describing the data points and the failure to clearly contrast the sectors limit the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression within paragraphs is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'To initiate with' and 'At the end of the year 2020'. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the sentence 'That field had started from only 2 after 5' is difficult to follow, making the relationship between ideas unclear. The overall flow is disjointed, and the transition between the description of different sectors lacks sophistication.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. Phrases like 'amount of jobs', 'job amount', and 'job figure' are used repeatedly, indicating a lack of lexical variety. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'amount of jobs in various field of US' and 'described steady drop'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends, relying on basic descriptors like 'increment' or 'increase' without the nuance required for a higher band. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic message but lacks the flexibility needed for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with articles ('the retail', 'the healthcare field'), prepositions ('at some up from'), and subject-verb agreement. Sentence construction is often awkward, such as 'The manufacturing field indicated first increase in between 1960-1980 and sudden downfall to 2020'. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data being presented. A greater focus on basic sentence accuracy is needed before attempting more complex structures.
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