Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided image give information about the number of job in four sectors ot the economy in US. The horizontal axis gives information about years ranging from 1960 to 2020. The vertical axis provides the information about jobs in millions. Manufacturing is the highest at 20 in year 1980 whereas agriculture is lowest at approximately 2.5 in year 2020. Retail and healthcare are growing olny from 1960 to 2020 however agriculture is going down from from 1960 to 2020. According to the line graph, retail and healthcare are equal in year 2020. Once, manufacture is at highest but in 2029 retail and healthcare are highest. Manufacturing is going up in year 1980 which is highest then it goes down slowly. At beginning, the lower one is healthcare but at the end agriculture job sector is at lowest point. In the beginning, manufacturing started at highest point and at the end, retails rich highest.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends in manufacturing, retail, and healthcare. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear overview. The description of the data is occasionally inaccurate, such as the mention of '2029' which is not present in the data, and the phrasing is repetitive. While the main trends are identified, the lack of a cohesive summary and the inclusion of minor, less relevant details prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview paragraph that highlights the most significant trends and avoid listing individual data points without comparing them effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear paragraph structure, which is essential for Task 1. The ideas are presented in a series of disjointed sentences rather than a logical flow. There is a lack of cohesive devices (such as 'however', 'furthermore', or 'consequently') to link ideas, making the text feel mechanical and repetitive. The progression of information is not always clear, as the writer jumps between sectors and time periods without a consistent approach. To improve, organize your response into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, using linking words to connect your observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'highest', 'lowest', 'going up', and 'going down'. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'olny' instead of 'only' and 'retails rich' instead of 'retail reached'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, incorporate more precise verbs and nouns related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined steadily', or 'surpassed'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The provided image give information'), article usage (e.g., 'in US'), and tense consistency. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Errors such as 'manufacture is at highest' and 'retail and healthcare are growing olny' demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammar. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and varying your sentence structure by combining simple ideas into more complex, compound sentences.
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