Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph show information regarding the different vacancies in four levels of the economy in the United state 1960 and 2020 in between .

To commence with , in 1960 job oppertunities are available 15 millions then incresse up to 20 million in between 1960 and 1980 as well as in retail sector job vacancies starts with 5 million but in these year 1960 and 1980 job availabilities are up with 10 million and in year 2000 it is 15 million and slightly going up with 17 million .

on the other hand , manufacturing jobs are decresse with 20 to 18 million in between 1980 and 2000. agriculture job sector is going down with 5 million to 3 million in 1960 and 1980 , jobs in healthcare sector is rocketly incresse in 1980 and 2000 with 5 million to 12 million as well . secandly ,vacancies in agriculture sector is decersse with 3 million to 2 million in year 2000 to 2020 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it mentions some data points, the selection of information is disjointed and lacks a logical summary of the overall patterns (e.g., the growth in healthcare versus the decline in agriculture). The reporting of data is often confusing, such as the unclear references to time periods like 'in these year 1960 and 1980'. The lack of a clear summary and the inaccurate reporting of some figures mean the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'To commence with' and 'secandly', which do not fit the context of a data summary. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to identify which sector is being discussed at any given time. The logical flow is hindered by the fragmented nature of the sentences and the lack of clear transitions between the different economic sectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'oppertunities', 'incresse', 'decresse', 'rocketly', and 'secandly'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for example, 'rocketly incresse' is not standard English. The student relies on basic phrasing, and the lack of precision in word choice makes it difficult to convey the data clearly. To improve, the student needs to focus on spelling and learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'experienced a sharp rise' instead of 'rocketly incresse'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The graph show', 'vacancies... is decersse'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making them difficult to parse. For instance, 'job oppertunities are available 15 millions then incresse up to 20 million' lacks proper structure and prepositional support. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Significant improvement in basic sentence construction and proofreading is required.

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